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GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

0 posted 2010-02-01 03:25 AM

I'd love to move you like the silent
darkness, water dripping down
and time curled up on your tongue
like lollipops in spring.

Maybe offer some kind of wisdom
that exhausts the ocean with its foamy tides
and sorrow too deep to hide,
still folded in your pocket.

You move so quickly and I
just want to catch your shadow
with it's black and white resolve.
Still you. Whisper. Calm the
terror dancing in your eyes.

My hand is small and when
I wipe your tears they drip
salty and warm down my fingers.
A lump grows in your throat
as you try to scream and I
just want to move you like
the reckless arms of love.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2010-02-01 12:26 PM

Very poignant!

Love,
Margherita

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

2 posted 2010-02-03 02:03 AM

Margherita, thanks!

Father
Member

since 2009-12-15

Posts 58
Confusion

3 posted 2010-02-03 06:55 PM

Yes... poignant is the word to describe this work. At once sad, longing, and hesitant, but filled with hope for the possibilities.
Well done.

My wife says I never listen... or something like that

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

4 posted 2010-02-04 09:17 AM

Beautifully written, my friend.

j.

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

5 posted 2010-02-08 06:20 AM

Father and J., much thanks for your kind replies. Be well...

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2010-02-08 12:24 PM

Just wow! Beautifully constructed.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2010-02-13 11:02 PM

GG - very impressive writing, held me in until the end. Waiting to see more of your work...

BC

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

8 posted 2010-02-14 12:24 PM

your words are eloquent in the capture of
what is relevant in your world at that time

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

9 posted 2010-02-17 01:37 AM

Mysteria,
thank you!

Bill,
Thanks, not writing a lot lately, but thought I'd stop in since a few words came to me...

inked,
I appreciate the kind words. Thank you.

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