Open Poetry #46 |
rattling chains |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Objectified and paid for-- denied my humanity with that clause in tiny print: "Just a fantasy, okay?" I-am-just-for-funsies me so tell me how much fun it was to label me as troubled as you poked at me with truant verbs ad hoc hornimen I am not here to pleasure you I'm barely here at all and now I'm so bare it frightens me opening the cage to change the news as if a fresher date might make it all okay again, I am the bird that flew away but at the very least you say: "At last the cage is cleaner now" I wonder how you sleep... |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Since this comes of as in-your-face-personal, I can only say I hope tomorrow is better. . . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(!$! |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
So much raw emotion. To be objectified...I think I'd be furious - seeing how I am NOT an object, and FAR from simple. Enjoyed this. -Trina. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
I am so impressed with your energy and shooting from the hip. This one made me feel like my hair got blown back. Wow! ebm |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
I love it, serenity . Your writing really resonates with this reader... you`ve such an ability to convey without spilling ott. Kudos! . Best~ Amaryllis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
your fragile is lovely K-bomb.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Being caged comes in many forms... trust me, the damned don't sleep for long. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sometimes the damned don't sleep at all... Thanks for reading, folks. This one was a long fuse sizzling from the K-bomb. *laughing* |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh wow, love your fury and your excellent poetry. I'm not going to tell you that I want to write like you do, cause it will never happen. But I sure do love reading you. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
passionate blast Celeste! If anyone can rattle them you can.....The ending slams like a steel door.... Great stuff! Eric |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ouch! Some serious passion in this one... as is usually the case with your writing. Solid. I bow to yours. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
as always, when i read you m'lady i am blown away. hugs miss you! mx |
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Dakota Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125New York |
What can I say but, WOW! Emotional chains are sometimes the hardest to break. |
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