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Martie
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0 posted 2010-11-02 02:20 PM



I look back and see time,
soft and folded to keep out the creases
made of cotton's constant bending,
it flows and turns magenta
just as the sun moves
and caresses the hard line of night.

Sometimes I feel I need to hurry,
to lap up truth
and with a hammer make dents
in the fabric that covers
the texture of life.

Tools, not weapons,
that I can make myself,
(I tell time's long face as it ticks in my ear)
made out of the swift current of my breath
from the boat of my hands,
not a scream tethering the spirit
to the whipping ball of some miraculous power
I know is heard even by the jellyfish
as they dance to the tides,
down in that place called,
More Than I Know.

Time remakes itself when we think it grows
and ages and groans and cries,
instead it is brand new and waiting
for someone to acknowledge
that it isn't very important, after all.

© Copyright 2010 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Eusta B. Mae
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1 posted 2010-11-02 02:33 PM


Wow Martie, Wonderful as ever!So many great lines I can't pick a favorite. ebm
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2010-11-02 02:40 PM


can almost see you wearing this shirt
with some of your favorite colors on it
enjoyed it ms

Amaryllis
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3 posted 2010-11-02 02:51 PM


For what it`s worth, I am always captivated by your works, Martie... such fine writing  
~Amaryllis

JerryPat
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4 posted 2010-11-02 03:08 PM


I love your outlook on this strange thing called life, Martie. You took me through layers of life as you perceive it and as I completely agree with. I especially like “Tools, not weapons, / that I can make myself,” is poignant in dealing with building our lives, and even tearing down certain walls that have imprisoned us. Wonderfully written, superbly thought out.

. . . and the Raven said, %!~#&(&#!$!

easy1
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5 posted 2010-11-02 06:08 PM


A keeper. You've got the power of soul in this one.
JamesMichael
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6 posted 2010-11-02 06:28 PM


Enjoyed...James
Prasad Nataraj
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7 posted 2010-11-03 06:18 AM


fine writing.

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

ethome
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8 posted 2010-11-03 06:25 AM


My GOD!! This is so good from beginning to end!!
I tried to pick out some extra special lines but they're all so damn good I just couldn't, so I have to say I really love the ending.....It's so fulfilling.
Ah, Martie my dear I haven't read your work for a quite a while but it most certainly hasn't suffered any...

Write on! Let me give ya just a little smooch nothing too serious. X0X

Eric

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9 posted 2010-11-03 10:20 AM


Smiling at you, enjoying the
return of your muse.

It's about time, all right.




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10 posted 2010-11-03 12:56 PM


your words are as always...a pleasure to read and to ponder. The talent you share here, truly enjoyed ma'am...

beautiful piece of work.... truly

Honeybunch
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11 posted 2010-11-03 04:13 PM


"Time remakes itself when we think it grows
and ages and groans and cries,
instead it is brand new and waiting
for someone to acknowledge
that it isn't very important, after all."

Absolutely right, Martie!  Always a pleasure to read your words!

Helen

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12 posted 2010-11-03 06:23 PM


lovely visuals!!
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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13 posted 2010-11-03 06:52 PM


Interesting write. Enjoyed this.

-Trina.

"To decieve ones self, is truly a grueling battle. One which we're destined to lose."

Martie
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14 posted 2010-11-03 06:56 PM


Thanks EBM for such a lovely comment.

DS..Maybe it's hanging in my imagination's closet...thanks, my friend.

Amaryllis....It's worth alot to me...thank you.

JerryPat...I really appreciate such a thoughtful comment...Thank you.

Thank you for your interest, Trina
Easy1...To be a keeper is indeed special..thank you.

James...Glad you enjoyed.

Prasad...thank you

Eric...thanks for such a wonderful review.  I was especially fond of the smooch. xox

Sissie...your smiles light up the day.  Hug!

Hi Ron...it's always such a pleasure to hear from you.

Helen...Hi!  I hope you are doing well.  Thanks for understanding.

X angel...I've not seen you for a long time...thanks for stopping to read and comment.

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