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Open Poetry #46

Fetter

A Beautiful Disaster
Member

since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2010-10-31 10:32 AM

I say: "Good morning everyone",
Turn on the light. The morning sun
Will never choose to greet this place
Of greed-trapped minds and sheer disgrace.
Some beer into inner space
To sink reality for instance
Is just the way of my resistance
Within this suffocating maze.

The fussy crowds in hurrying trams,
The same old streets, the traffic jams
Are too disgusting for my eyes -
They seek lush colors of surprise.
My heart's a rose yet to bloom,
And all it needs is Heaven's cater,
But I will never break the fetter
Of northern winds and autumn gloom.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2010-10-31 11:01 AM

Autumn is both a wonderfully bright and colorful season as well as one filled all to often with the gloom of grey skies and changing winds... the dichotomy of her personality makes her a fine metaphor for us as humans I think....and one those in the northern part of the world can't escape..

enjoyed you write ma'am... nicely done

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

2 posted 2010-10-31 01:31 PM

Great write, here... quite genuine, and the rhyme does not feel forced.. good job

Best~
Amaryllis

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