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rebelrea
Junior Member

since 2010-10-22

Posts 20
Michigan, USA

0 posted 2010-10-22 08:06 PM

Sorry it's a little long,, but please comment!

And the light shines down upon us
like a small star hoping it will not die
knowing in minds eye, the night may never end

Although the sun may rise barely over the horizon
it will never reach the heights of noon

As darkness spreads across the land
shadows fill every once blossoming corner
for the beautiful greens will shrivel without the light of day

Blue ocean tides sink back and turn gray
never once again sparkling before the sunset
turning into seas of sorrow and dams of despair

Still, the planet orbits around the sun
but no piercing light will reach it

Slowly it spins away from the center
before the sun dies like the other hope filled stars
slipping away from its existence
what makes its life, its own

Put a person in place of this planet
filled with pity, dread and dark
sad, sorrow, and searching… but for what?
A small glimmer of hope, that light of day?
Imagine what would happen to this beautiful person
if their own world slipped away

~RMB~

rvall
New Member

since 2010-10-21

Posts 8

1 posted 2010-10-23 01:00 AM

I really enjoyed your piece. It brought together very big ideas and brought it to everyday sadness

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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2 posted 2010-10-23 02:06 AM

I think we all search for something at one time or another

and are all sad too

nice flow with the nature theme here...always loved the ocean and the sky...

welcome to Passions

and if you think this is long, wait till you come across some of our writers here...this is short compared to some

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2010-10-23 09:48 AM

This is a very thought-provoking piece and a fine first post for our members to read and enjoy.

Welcome to Passions. You'll surely find a comfortable place among us where you can share your feelings with others.

Please check your mailbox for a special greeting...

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Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2010-10-23 10:13 AM

Reagen

Welcome to Passions. Thank you for stopping by and reading one of my poems. I really appreciate a new member activating their account with us in that manner.

I'm so glad that at age 14, you have a "spotlight" in the world in which to grow and share your poetry. This is a wonderful venue and you will enjoy many years here. There are a great number of talented writers and poets who will be more than willing to share their experiences with you.

Again, Welcome!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2010-10-24 02:59 AM

Welcome to passions, rebelrea. Enjoyed you first post, hope to see many more. Thoughtful writing for one so young. I think will enjoy the blue pages.
Ida

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