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Driftwood VI
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Driftwood VI |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
She wore her finest lichen lace With an inlaid ebony filligre At her décolletage Sandalwood scent invitations from her everyplace He pondered her pleasing possibilities Under his knowing hands And cutting edge He whetted at her intricacies Driftwood held her ground and his gaze Soaking in the whetting Of his stare Blowing smoke rings in a daze She was rooted in place Her burning desire Enflamed Glowed radiant on her face He engraved himself into her moss green eyes As he came toward her He was felled by her hollow So deeply ingrained with denials and lies |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
you just get better and better at these... and I enjoy them... I see you use whetted twice, and might think of substituting another word for the second use.. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
I did that intentionally because that was what she was soaking in. I rarely ever repeat words... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah~~ well I often mistakenly repeat words and have to go back and "fix" them if I catch them... but like you I try to rarely repeat |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"He engraved himself into her moss green eyes As he came toward her" the breath quickens the heart races well done |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ahhhh catching up, I am!  |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Wonderful imagery and expectations. You conjure up the most pleasing, but unorthodox words as you wander through your scenes. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Hey there Lady I'm so sorry I missed your kind words, thank you so much __________________________________________ Me too! Hugs! __________________________________________ Jerry- unorthodox? Woo-who! From you I take that as high praise. Your words are so kind. thank you |
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Dakota Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125New York |
Anyone have some ice? Smoking imagery. Very nice! Dave |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Dave-I'm glad Driftwood caught your attention and you liked it!ebm |
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