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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-09-29 07:37 AM

I chanced upon a hiccup
on my way across the plains
and it rose and dipped according to
the way hiccups always do.

It came as a complete surprise;
could hiccups be the way of life
which like a bomb distracts the mind
from the good essential?

I thought the plains a solid base
not an undulated mess
that tests the front, sideways, back,
of how I present myself ~
but now I know they simply are
a place where hiccups lie in wait
to pounce upon the loving.

And hiccups are like cereal
vitamin enriched, of course,
to energize distractions from
and distortions of the truth.

I once was still on “them there” plains
before the advent of hiccups
that wear the guise and act like life
to turn believers doubtful.

To myself and those who love,
a hiccup’s just a hiccup
only armed to chase us from the plains
if we ourselves run scared!

Helen / 29 September 2010

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2010-09-29 10:24 AM

Enjoyed reading this! I know you are being metaphorical and I much appreciate that, but this also brings back memories of "Road Dips" country---which I have not had the pleasure of visiting for quite a while now.

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

2 posted 2010-09-29 10:01 PM

*grin*

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

3 posted 2010-09-30 01:11 AM

Thanks so much for the read, easyl.

Charly -

Me too!

Helen

Yuka
Member

since 2010-08-19

Posts 71
china

4 posted 2010-09-30 07:38 AM

a hiccup’s just a hiccup
only armed to chase us from the plains
if we ourselves run scared!

---enjoyed very much.

Yuka Chan

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

5 posted 2010-10-02 09:31 AM

And hiccups are like cereal
vitamin enriched, of course,
to energize distractions from
and distortions of the truth.

very much enjoyed this and the originality...well done my friend...

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

6 posted 2010-10-07 07:45 PM

Like LeeJ I would have to agree that the stanza comparing hiccups to cereal was quite unique and clever.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

7 posted 2010-10-09 02:52 AM

Quite unique, Helen. Enjoyed.
Ida

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

8 posted 2010-10-09 04:33 AM

Thank you dear poets! I really do appreciate you taking the time to read and comment.

Helen

Namyh
Senior Member

since 2009-01-20

Posts 988

9 posted 2010-10-09 05:08 PM

Honeybunch – Sometimes I think those hiccups are intentionally designed to test out faith, belief and love to see how well we bounce back after being knocked down. What better way to test the will to breath and live than with a hiccup. Who set that up? I enjoyed this and your poetic moral “if we ourselves run scared”. Nicely done Helen. Namyh

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

10 posted 2010-10-10 08:25 PM

A fun and interesting read. The rolling plains... Mother Nature's hiccups. Always a pleasure. I bow to you and yours.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

11 posted 2010-10-10 08:58 PM

you're too cute!!

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

12 posted 2010-10-10 11:14 PM

Thanks guys!

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