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Gretel and Teutoburg Dream
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Gretel and Teutoburg Dream |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thick these trees and the darker shadow remain Till noon when in a slight lift of veil one might say It only dim Legions here in Bones lie now Gretel held the tiny hand and wandered on Wanting sweet the taste of more Dropping crumbs to find her way Among the bleach of rib and clavicles Strewn in leaves and pine Perhaps, she thought as the sole of feet Raised a must of dust from path A Queen I will become To dance among the finest ladies As I have only seen The once Time upon And they marched on across the river Met in hale blows from the cowards who Would not stand in rows and march Like men of Rome Gretel turned to the brother there Released his hand and brushed back her hair Singing soft a song she'd learned To sing when fear Stalked her mind "Oh hungry I am" she cried And turned to basket and looked inside Only to meet her brother's eyes The other way, looking in "No bread is left" she sighed And turned to see the crumbs she dropped Devoured by crows with crimson crowns "and we are lost" her brother cried All is gone! The echo rang Through empty trees and on the bodies now Two legions deep strewn along with stone And arrows fletch from deep within These tall dark trees "A house!" "Lets go my brother dear" She wished with fervent tears To be home~~ to be home~~ While in the window looking out Livia sighed and thought of a bath For both and let greed begin to form "So I shall" she whispered Gretel fought the dream with silent scream Having forgotten tales of witches and wolves to turn and reach again for what had never been Footnote: Teutoburg is a forest in Germany, where the Roman army lost 25000 men in a defeat as it tried to invade the region. They were defeated from behind the thick stand of trees that would not allow them to form ranks and fight as they were trained. Livia was born in 59 or 58 BCE. The daughter of a Roman noble named Marcus Livius Drusus Claudianus, she is often referred to as Livia Drusilla. At the age of 15 or 16, she was married to Tiberius Claudius Nero, who was an opponent of the young Octavian. It was rumored that she had some hand in the early deaths of some of Augustus's designated heirs, though never proven and much against the personna she is attibuted to have had. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (08-30-2010 08:08 AM).] |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
I am in awe as always. I admire the way you can weave two subjects together to form a story and yet carry a message in between. Enjoyed! ~Sunkissed  |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
Way cool with the history! First with the math, now this. Quite a talent, I'd say. Enjoyed! ebm |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunkissed... you are entirely too kind, but thank you for such nice words. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
EBM... many thanks... I am glad you could appreciate this |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Goodness gracious, dear Poet, you have woven a fabulous story here ... history and fairy tales mixed in a harmonious, captivating flow of words. I will keep this, because it is something that speaks to me ...Haensel und Gretel ... and Livia ... both in a way part of my life. Fantastic job! Love, Margherita |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
... forgot to click the library  now, it's done. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Margherita happy you enjoyed ma'am |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
intriguing, very intriguing I enjoyed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks ma'am... glad you found it interesting |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Much like Gregory Maquire, you take a story and manage to keep it intact while you make it your own. Very well done rt. |
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