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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan 
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. An old streetlamp Or sunlit moon Through the window A soft gray glow On cast off clothes It is summer— On the road outside There are occasional cars A swishing sound Like waves on shore As they go passing by For hours today You talked of work Some movie to see The one just seen Your cat at home And a new wool coat You saw at the mall . . . It’s no more again Than all the days before Ashes to ashes Dust to dust Layer upon layer Of sediment And as I look at your face I think to myself— You have no idea who you are . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
You can help her to find out though with your understanding, wisdom and love. An invitation to go deeper into the meaning of life. Well done! Margherita |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
. “This, John, is beautiful. It's reminiscent of John Burnside's work, and also a poem that won the National a few years back that I loved by Beatrice Garland, "undressing": http://www.poetrysociety.org.uk/content/competitions/npc/npc01/ It's one of those poems that starts ever so quietly and relies heavily on establishing and maintaining a tone and atmosphere, and which creates in the reader a spine tingling anticipation that the quietness and gentleness are cloaking something: some great truth or final tragedy. Burnside is brilliant at doing it, and often that anticipation or expectation in his poems is an end in itself, and they fade softly against some soft mist or dusk filled evening. This poem of yours however runs down wonderfully to that final, almost hauntingly painful line: "You have no idea who you are" and when I read it, I smiled at the inevitability and rightness of it as the closure. It's poems like this that remind me why Boards like AT are so worthwhile Thank you Rob” . |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A great comment, thank you for sharing it. |
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