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Open Poetry #46

Ariel's whisper

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2010-08-17 10:51 PM

Ariel's Whisper

What lies beneath a broken heart
If hope and love dwindle away
As dreams and reality part
Too long before the dusk of day

Watch every thread fall apart
While loose ends begin to fray.
So can't I, restrain my own heart
Nor prevent these eyes to betray

What lies beneath a broken heart
Is that my lips so long to say
I don't know where things end or start
Only that I want you to stay

What lies beneath my heart
Forgives what made you stray

-Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

1 posted 2010-08-17 11:28 PM

I can feel the saddness. Nicely done.
Kat >^..^<

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2010-08-18 06:51 AM

hmmm... it sounds like what the heart holds is a treasure someone has not recognized...
a nice piece ma'am... touching the sadness and the hopes of the heart

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2010-08-21 09:56 PM

Nice...James

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2010-08-22 02:15 AM

jules girl...this is just heart-wrenching

but so good

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