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0 posted 2010-08-02 05:17 PM

Over the elk trail and down through the valley
Past the high falls and the brook and the beech
Onward I follow with lungs fit to bursting
Give me the strength you are almost in reach
I read all the signs at a lick and cantor
Up valleys down gorges I followed your trail
Just stay alive and I swear that I’ll find you
On the blood of my tribe I will die or prevail
The Huron are many the high pass is narrow
So close now I see every tear that you cry
Past one then another my tomahawk flashes
Until Magua’s before me with blood in his eye
My strength it has failed me his blade drains my heart
But the pain I feel most is that we’ll be apart

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Andrew Scott
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1 posted 2010-08-03 01:28 AM

A solid follow-up piece to "Death Song." Thanks for sharing.  
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2 posted 2010-08-04 02:34 AM

excellent words, love the parallele words with indians and the feelings it conveys...
have a nice day


Member Rara Avis
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3 posted 2010-08-08 05:26 PM

Whenever I read of the people, and of the earth through their eyes...I am touched by their kinship; as the thought, the hand, the heart and spirit move together in one swift and true course.
Enjoying your works.  Thanks

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