Open Poetry #46 |
Tooth Ache (Impressonistic Poetry from the Poetry Workshop) |
Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Tooth Ache A daily taste of throbbing pain Will alter how the world is viewed It starts with ache that builds to roar Paints shadows on most brilliant hues This water color washed with tears That brim and fall from weary eyes Is born from pain, erased by fears Until sensation fades and dies - Alison |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Yeah, That about says it all, Alison. Ida |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Alison, wonderfully written and true, Teeth ache is the worst and change our view of the world, it is important to be happy while in good health and thanks for sharing this surprising poem... best wishes yann |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Funny, you could have replaced the word tooth, with love, in your title, and it would have made just as much sense, if not more. Well for my weird mind anyway Sorry about the toothache Allison, I hope your dentist pulls the tooth, the whole tooth, and nothing but the tooth. Wonderful write dear friend. Richard xx |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I remember pain like that... I always love your Workshop assignments though I don't really have time to take on any myself great piece! |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
Really original. I never would have thought of writing a poem about a toothache, much less making it "impressionistic." Must have been a great workshop because it's a grat poem. |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
ouch...it worked!
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Dadygoose Member
since 2010-01-01
Posts 162A Communist country |
Yes, Ali. pain can indeed distort perception. Can you chew yet, Ali??? later Funs Jaime Hey, nobody's human! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Alison, I had the last of my rotten teeth pulled when I was abot thirty. I worn false teeth ever since. It's the best present I ever gave myself. Love Bobby |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Alison, you succeeded perfectly in the challenge. I may try one myself as soon as I can think of a subject M |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Well done, Alison. If based on "reality" I hope you are now pain free. Got to agree with Richy though. Helen |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Oh man, I love you guys. Bobby, I am not giving up on my teeth yet. Nope. Rich, I am so glad that the parallel came through. I was working for that end. Helen, yes, this is definitely written from recent experienc. I have had an infected nerve on a tooth - it's been sheer agonizing hell. I think that it is conquered now though. Jaime, I can't chew on that side yet and the pain still comes on at night. I have moved from Percocet to Tylenol now. That's a good thing. Maureen, I hope that you try the assignment soon. I love working with you in the Workshop. I counted up how many assignments I have to do to catch up - I'll be working on them. Bastet, when you live with something that becomes a major part of your life - writing about it is a carthesis. Writing about it was an indication to me that I can move on. Yay for that! Belle, Ida, Dixie and Yann - thank you with all my love. Why do I feel like I just wrote one of those gushing award-accepting speeches? xoxoxo A |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
impressionstic assignment? well done ma'am... and in rhyme |
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crosscountry83 Member
since 2009-07-30
Posts 345 |
Ooh Alison, I'm jealous of your meter. It's insanely good. And even though I can't relate, I could still feel the feeling. Good job - Rileigh |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you both for reading, commenting and enjoying. xoxo A |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Dear Alison I feel for you my dear for bad tooth ache can be a debilitating problem, rendering sufferes incapable of carrying out their dayly chores. my sincere sympathy to you. I hope when you read this it will have gone completely. love and a big hug. Lindsay |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Oh yeah! You've got the toothache down... Nice job on Impressionistic Poetry! Much enjoyed, Alison. (Sure hope the toothache was long ago!) misce' |
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