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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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Billow I lay back on a lazy afternoon watching the ocean blue in the sky and saw a conversation of clouds words swirled with no effort of soft murmurs in a babbling voice thin wisp lines spoken unthinking on heavy frothy lip foamed secrets where a hasty dialogue undressed recklessly with no regard rushing without consideration of the casualness naked related words spilled milky this visible rolling language heavy and light sounds changed with direction to different shapes spoken slow fast careless whispers to explain the phrases of feelings a soliloquy to no one and all listening "I'm so hard to handle I'm selfish and I'm sad." — Joni Mitchell |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms slick...one of the few things that cause me to look up..enjoyed you here |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
Leave it to you to know the language of Weather or not Of hear I come To song of sky And wind of hum This cotton kiss Is known aloft To souls who float On pillow soft I hear these too Helen, with ears wide shut. Richard xx |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very Lovely. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
enjoyed... |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
A really beautiful metaphor about nature and words carried all the way through the poem. You have something to say and you know how to say it in very poetic terms. Bravo! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"a soliloquy to no one and all listening" loved it...and your words, Helen. M |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
"a soliloquy to no one and all listening" sums up what poetry itself is..in many ways.. our own soliloquy, that others may or may not listen to..may or may not hear... enjoyed ma'am.... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I do so love cloud conversations. Thank you for this. Alison |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
Just listening to the words as I read them outloud is like a guilty pleasure |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is exquisite, Helen! Very beautifully and artfully expressed! |
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Dadygoose Member
since 2010-01-01
Posts 162A Communist country |
Ohh myyyyy, how silky ssenuously ssssssensssssual. What would the clouds feel like if I could touch them? Ddelicate? Filmy? Silky? Foamy? Bubbling? Sweirling? shapge changing under my hands? :--------------)!!!!! Me Hey, nobody's human! |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Helen, only you could write "and saw a conversation of clouds" I am speechless. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Skies are only a mirror shadowing life...and what a picture can play in one's imagination... Good stuff, this! |
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