chapstick foreclosure - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2010-06-23 07:17 AM

you and your most special presentations
those smiles with that chap stick shimmer
and a kiss muffled suggestion after
it was always quite amazing you said

how our mouths seemed to be the same
like little fish feeding on windows
when we wanted to say bad words together
before our body places made us speechless

and we dove into each other's oceans
searching for those hidden treasures again
finding them too, just like we left them
the last time we crashed into each other

melding our coves and coveting the waves
that would erode our proper composures
chapping our lips with that panting polish
that turned our sands into glass eventually

taking our quiet contentment into foreclosure

_____________

daark

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2010-06-23 08:35 AM

Your inspiration is as ancient in tone
as are your metaphors of glass and sand,
and as we know, not all glass is clear,
as not all sands become glass, so your
sandy words are always special, as they
always allow some glimpse into a process
that precedes human intervention...

so please, continue to write in the sand,
as I am a collector of glass.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2010-06-23 10:08 AM

quote:
and we dove into each other's oceans
searching for those hidden treasures again
finding them too, just like we left them
the last time we crashed into each other

Not only the above quoted, but every line has its own charm. Now isn't that a lovely mood to be in

!

You cause sighs, you know!

Love,
M

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2010-06-23 11:51 AM

ms sun, thank you for playing in my sand box..you bless me lady.

___________

ms mar, thank you lady friend for your eyes that touch my humble words

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

4 posted 2010-06-23 02:28 PM

Ah, the master writes of an ocean women dream to drown in...

[This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (06-23-2010 03:41 PM).]

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2010-06-23 03:16 PM

thank you ms

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2010-06-23 03:21 PM

NOw there you go sir.... the ladies enjoying the ride, and the wordplay as good as it gets... only you could make fish kissing glass sound sexy. :-)

enjoyed...as always...

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2010-06-23 03:46 PM

Cpat..thanks amigo...I know the fish like the image..but they do act a bit koi about it all

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

8 posted 2010-06-23 05:21 PM

LOL~

LOVED this, Dark <3

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2010-06-23 06:10 PM

thanks darkdot...your lols are always a pleasure

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

10 posted 2010-06-24 04:24 AM

I know my comments must be tedious but you are the master of the line. `How our mouths used to be the same ... like little fish feeding on windows` What a line!

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2010-06-24 06:04 AM

EB...your comments are always appreciated..humble thanks guy

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.