Open Poetry #46 |
sleepslick and jello brandy |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
woman of the worldly willows glancing do you still sip those whiskey songs down and press your belly to their moan music do you remember how my hands fit your sins and made you whisper vulgar words slowly as if the sensations of their syllables soothed or stirred the heathen need of hearing voices the ones less proper than ladylike authorized but the ones that were needed there more often to keep the edges of your armor well oiled mostly and sometimes just wet enough to swim your sighs into the lovely concussions you could strum while straddling highway lines with your eye ways _____________ daark |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Not a lot I can say..I just read, admire the use of word and phrase..enjoy the read... no one does it quite like you Sir... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
humblemumbled thanx Cpat..I appreciate your reviews |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, my, how you make the words dance! A wild, passionate dance that accelerates the heartbeat. Love, M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms mar, thank you sweet lady friend |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
DS- I could dance to this. [This message has been edited by Lori Grosser Rhoden (06-23-2010 03:45 PM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
thanks ms, I appreciate the read |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lots and lots of alliteration here... always well done, sunny side up...light toast and butter salty... and of course there are the willows... I have written of willows, but their flow is always different from here to there. Oh yeah...I like the poem, too! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sun...I always enjoy the flavor of your replies...how they fit my mind lips like a sip of lady whiskey...thanks babe |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
You have given a whole new definition to syllables! As if they could sooth! You are the master of the line! Where do these lines come from? |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
EB....they are the sounds (I imagine) of the highway under gypsy wheels....the sounds of a woman sky in mornings as she wear only the dawn..the sounds of an ocean mating some cove with fervent undulations..thanks amigo |
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Kethry D Member
since 2010-04-12
Posts 64Australia |
Daark and not a little disturbing, but compelling none the less. A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I like this one.... Nice to see you |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Kethry, it is a pleasure to disturb you (grin) it was quite light really or the highway and the lady are/were, thanks ________________ hey zin...good to see you too, thanks for the read |
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