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I miss the sea
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I miss the sea |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
I miss the sea As one improvised party On a bridge of Istambul, As a disappearing girl In the angle of a populated street, I miss the sea as a foreign language as millions of glances frienly and opened, As a space which offers me the infinite greatness of its presence, As a present of Cristmas, As a loving smile Which is transformed into river, I miss the sea as a mountain to which I don’t know what to say, As a forest perfume Where we can lose our past, I miss the sea as jewels Which shine on accessible wrists, As the air which I inhale in your eyes, I miss the sea as you, As the birds which cross you And block the road of the sun, But a wave takes away the sea And suddenly everything has to be rebuild. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: You dare to put into words your deepest thoughts and visions and the result is grand! I love this poem, dear Yann. Love, Margherita  [This message has been edited by Margherita (06-22-2010 05:11 AM).] |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I love how this reads, yann. It's so filled with yearning and yann (sorry, couldn't resist). Anyway, I follow your poetry and never fail to enjoy it. A |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Lovely use of metaphor and of imagery, especially seaside imagery. We wish for prosperous calm in reality, yet even fortunate in love our metaphors are continually rebuilt. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Wonderful ode to the ocean.. I`m loving all of the new simile you`ve used to describe the yearning for the sea! Suberb ~Amaryllis |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah friend, I feel this one deeply I too miss the sea, and hope to go back soon |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I feel this way too. Nicely done. |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Nice. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Dear Margherita, you are the best words and compliments...I feel humble when you write and owe you delicious words...Thanks a lot yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Dera Alison, Thanks for the lovely comment, you found an original word so yann, i never heard that before and it makes me smile, I guess every poet writes his own way and it is always a pleasure to share poetry like yours... have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks easy for the accurate comment and understanding of rebuilding...Your words touched me... regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Amaryllis for the beautiful and kind comment...I owe you this one... regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks PS, yes sometimes sea is a friend for souls, thanks for the kind comment... regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thanks catalinamoon for sharing, reading and commenting. have a nice day yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks Lamar. yann |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks James. yann |
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