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My First Poetry Post |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
RAISING THE SAIL “The winds of grace are blowing all the time-- it is up to us to raise the sail—“ Ramakrishna How many times I heard that said before I set out on this voyage. It was my mother's favorite words and I heard them all my live. Yet it wasn't until she was gone that I took her words to heart. Now who knows where these sails of faith will take me? Because of her words, I chose a path most women would never take. Into the stars, beyond the moons and as far as imagination could go. No one expects me to return, and perhaps I will remain, for the winds of grace have brought me to a special time and place. I do not know the people here, they do not look like me, but inside our hearts we hear each other and I've never had that before. Perhaps this world is where I should have been born, My mother was trying to tell me to make that leap into the dark unknown. I feel her here, so far from home, in a place no one has ever been. But now, this is home and I think I shall never return. |
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Earl Brinkman Senior Member
since 2010-03-03
Posts 1183Osaka, Japan |
For me this poem has special meaning in that I have chosen to live in a foreign country so far from home where people have different customs and speak a different language. That said no matter how far you go away from home part of your soul lingers in the nest that you left. ---- The language that you employ in this piece sets the appropriate tone. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Everything was the 'unknown' until somebody took that voyage. Sounds as though your mother motivated you to make your own world. Welcome to the blue pages, (I'm the only normal one here by the way). LOL |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
Thank you, Earl and Toerag, for the kind words. By the way, define "normal"? |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is a wonderful tribute to your mother and an equally wonderful first post with PipTalk. Welcome to our family, and please check your email for a special greeting...  |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I mean think? Anyone with a name like "Toerag"??? And, I'm from Alabama too? |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
That's a downright scary thought...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Hi there  welcome! funny how home changes with wherever one is at the time...good write here |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
Welcome to Pips Eldest. I really am touched by this poem. Home has a certain, different meaning to me lately. One small thing though, at the end of the 2nd line, did you mean "live" or "life"?? |
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Eldest Member
since 2010-06-15
Posts 177Alabama |
you're right, should be life, missed that one. Thanks. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Hello Eldest.. welcome to PiP!  . I enjoyed this poem.. speaking to displacement and `blooming where you`re planted`.. great read . Best~Amaryllis |
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Namyh Senior Member
since 2009-01-20
Posts 988 |
Eldest - All progress is a leap in the dark. And if mom says leap....then leap!Moms always seem to know best, even when we think we know better. With change comes growth. I enjoyed this very much Eldest. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dear Eldest... I share that title with you. I broke rote by doing what my parents thought I might not, being the person I was then, 40 years ago. Now of course, it is nothing extraordinary, but still, as is said above, one never travels too far from their parents, their home, when the love of them was so great. Your mother taught you well. I look forward to reading more from you. Thank you for finding Passions. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Eldest - a beautiful write, really enjoyed reading this. I once lived in Alabama and still miss it... BC |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Hi Eldest a warm welcome to PIP, you are now among friends and if that is a fair sample of what you write You will have many friends. An enjoyable write, well done. Lindsay |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Sometimes the dove returns to the ark, and sometimes it doesn't, according to an old story. Thanks for a good read, and welcome. |
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Bastet Member
since 2010-05-07
Posts 246 |
I have been an ex-pat for the past forty years. Of course, now I have become more or less a citizen of the world, but I still sometimes have doubts about having left my roots. This poem, which is very well written, really speaks to me. Good luck with your future writing. |
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