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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now 
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On a chill evening, I will clear the dinner, while children laugh in velvet dusk outside- I rattle, clang displeasure. Silence simmers from his reading chair, his down-cast eyes. Anger, like a seep of creeping poison pollutes a room grown stale with swallowed words- much as a luscent pool becomes more loathsome, when choked with stagnant litter, like these hurts. Yet gradual, across my selfish sadness and indignance, comes a whispered surge- a call to sweet remembrance and forgiveness, a casual and careful white flag urge. Then my iced eye again will thaw to rain, and love will knead the granite core again. |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
P.S.. Derivative from Gwedolyn Brooks` "Piano after War". |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Wow! So much, said so well, in one poem. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Amazing work, dear Amaryllis. Welcome to Pip! Love, Margherita |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Many many thanks to both of you! Means a lot  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
tender your name fits you |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I get this, I understand this, and I love this. |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
This was a mirror of words I just looked into. I'm going to have to start closing my eyes when I come here so that you can't read my mind. I love this. Richard xx |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you so much, CG and Richy! ~Amaryllis |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Then my iced eye again will thaw to rain, and love will knead the granite core again. Loved those lines! |
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Amaryllis Senior Member
since 2010-05-20
Posts 1306Mi now |
Thank you, 1slick_lady and Mysteria! So much |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
A very enjoyable read, with harmony of words and thoughts...thanks for the poem. regards yann |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"Then my iced eye again will thaw to rain, and love will knead the granite core again." Very well said! Enjoyed! Helen |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am so happy that I took that pause and stopped to read. A |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Yet gradual, across my selfish sadness and indignance, comes a whispered surge- a call to sweet remembrance and forgiveness, a casual and careful white flag urge. Then my iced eye again will thaw to rain, and love will knead the granite core again. Very well written Amaryilis, you certainly have a wonderful way with words. Lindsay |
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