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Open Poetry #46

The Distant Ring

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

0 posted 2010-05-17 06:07 PM

In twelve hours the world changes
our world changes in 12 hours
minute by minute
decisions actions change our destiny

in our control
out of our control
all we can do is
the best we can

the rest is up to God

and it is midnight
and in the distance
I hear the tolling of the bells
the skeleton pulls the string

up the tower
the chimes
the tolling of the bells
ring

one second closer
one minute closer
an hour goes by
and he pulls the string

and the tolling of the bells
ring

one hour closer to death
one hour closer
to the rest

of our lives

N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
Member

since 2009-07-30

Posts 360
New Orleans

1 posted 2010-05-20 04:19 AM

Vivid imaging

Beautifully captured.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

2 posted 2010-05-20 09:10 AM

great moment about time and ringing clock, a very vivid and original atmosphere...

regards

yann

Eusta B. Mae
Senior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

3 posted 2010-05-20 10:36 AM

great rythm. I really loved this in an OMG TIME IS SHORT sort of way...good capture. ebm

martiniat8
Senior Member

since 2003-06-21

Posts 897
Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic

4 posted 2010-05-20 11:43 AM

thanks guys, glad you like it, this is Prague. There is an animated skeleton on the famous astronomical clock, he pulls the string, and rings the bell. It is something to be seen...

ken206573
Member

since 2008-10-14

Posts 487

5 posted 2010-05-20 05:05 PM

The poem flowed nicely and lasted much longer than the days here. As well for the ones soon to come.

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