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a shadow's past (retitled for Dixie)
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a shadow's past (retitled for Dixie) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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My mercury is not like yours my yearning's there atop my skin-- I taste the bite of fruit of sin just waiting for a breeze. My hunger is a craving, young a contest waiting for a name something wild on tottered edge a game in search of rules of ease. My yearn is deeper than my lung-- I'm fathomless in desperate lunge. compounding self within Her tide aware the ocean's bubble rise dreamland death in yearn of light explosion of a heart in burst my need is deeper than my thirst-- my thirst throws sand upon my lies. My tongue is but a taste grown old. remains of me, unquenchable my toes are jingle-jangle bells-- my eyelids are the gates to hell-- never never ever closed. * * * Dixie? I have a theory that all addiction starts with an intense desire for peace. I pray you find that on your journey. Much love to you. OH. I was gonna rework this, but I thought, nawwww....  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Kinda psychedelic, that's what I really love about your poetry. It takes on a life of it's own, and then some. |
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Eusta B. Mae Senior Member
since 2010-05-03
Posts 903 |
"my need is deeper than my thirst--" ...there were so so many cool lines...but this one seemed to resonate...I like your style! ebm |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
A timely reminder of the addictions we face, hope Dixie comes out of this in tact, she has been through a lot, hope she has a more calm and contented future soon. Goldenrose. Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron. |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
"my thirst throws sand upon my lies" very deep and meaning phrasing..you share your words with a very unique style and you do it well.ww |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Hugging you, heaven sent mistress of all that should be. Read your mail.   |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A friend asked me if I was sober when I wrote this--the honest answer was "I dunno." A lot of my life is like that, and I'm not sure if that's owning responsibility or disowning culpability. But I do thank you all for you time. (And Dixie? I lied a little. I'm pretty sure I dropped an "en" from the last never to make it an "ever". So that's kind of re-worked, yes? Re-titled too. Just for...for US.  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you have surely given food for thought... and remarkably indeed! enjoyed... Lee J. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Your honesty sometimes rips open the heart but also fills it. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well, my friend, I am glad I dropped in today and read this (to my pleasant surprise) I very much enjoyed this poem and am keeping it in my library, and the responses too... and the very heart of you. It's a warm, cozy feeling to know that someone understands my drunk talk sometimes. *cheers* here's to US and thank you for this, just what I needed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
There she is... I just wanted you to know I'm thinking of ya, and wished to send a hug your way. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
back atcha |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - no need to rewrite this or change it at all, it's excellent as is. At least in my eyes and thoughts when I read it... BC |
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