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The Love Tree. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. 
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hurriedly pushing the color from my veins raising my arms and painting myself into a tree in hopes that you will sit beneath me escaping the harsher heats and rays of sun the days will go by and you will come back to me, enjoying your bottles of water in my shade cooling your skin, moist with sweat when fall comes you will still come around from time to time to see colors of love in my leaves before they fall to the ground. ________________________________________________ Burp. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
I dig your poetry. It comes and goes straight to the heart. NIcccceeee. Z |
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MorningStar Member
since 2009-10-26
Posts 290Pittsburgh, Pa |
This is so beautiful. I could see it all in my mind... Totally loved this. Aenea If I don't say it...who will? |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
You hit the mark with this one...great imagery with the tree analogy...you ability to describe your feeling is great...sincere and heartfelt...well done.ww |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks everyone. You all keep me writing.  <3Zigz, you baller. Aenea. You're the bomb. Pretty, to boot.  WW, dude, you've been following me. I'm honored! Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I'm so loving this, Metal man~ Now why did you have ruin it and burp? You're excused already!  You're a great poet and I don't think you give yourself enough credit! |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
when fall comes you will still come around from time to time to see colors of love in my leaves before they fall to the ground. These lines are killer Paul. You always have the best phrasing. You really should be published.(if not already) |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
really nice images which helped my mind to feel each word, thank you |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Blues, thank you. You're all too kind. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
CG, you flattering southern man, you. Thanks much sir, I would submit my stuff to somebody if I knew who to submit to. LeeJ... Thanks! Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Lamar Cole Member
since 2009-05-01
Posts 274 |
Very Nice. |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thanks. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
very deep and beautiful metaphor, aren't we trees of love? thanks for the moving words. yann |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you, yann. Always so nice to me. Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Most enjoyable I would say. Trees and love combine so beautifully here. Love, Margherita |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
viking_metal - a great writing and enjoyed reading and also the thoughts it mentions... BC |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
Thank you, BC Fall in love early, fall in love often. |
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