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icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2010-05-08 08:35 PM

Lopsided idiot grins,
so it begins
and so it begins;

love,
with sparkling electric sugar blossoms
on flickering dreams tricked out in crystalline delight,
no one sleeping through the nights
warmly wrapped in gleems of woven soul desires,
thrills of exploration;

overheated wedding rings
quenched in sarcasm's liquid eye
hammered into flying dagger harmonies.

Turn the cheek to dance only in memories,
lilting tilting tunes of a piano that's been drinking,
cross the medicine and hope to die,
chewing on what should be thrown away
with bone chips and gristle of a butchered love,

dying remnants
of sticky cotton candy wrappers and color crusted snow cone cups
dropped in muddy wallows
just inside the entrance at an abandoned carnival of lust.

Rivened love gone off the rails,
keeping dogs for lonely nights
when sanity prevails,
every sin a signpost on the seven bridges road,
just debris from two of us.

©2010 by icebox

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2010-05-08 09:11 PM

One of the best "love" poems I have read, Charley.
Ida

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2010-05-16 08:43 PM

"overheated wedding rings"

sounds like a mechanical problem.

A couple of gems and I have been thinkin' boutcha!

If you're feeling chatty enough to write, you can find me at the old addy. (Abraxist grew to be exhausting.)

Simply Funda Mental

*chuckle*

you know I love a good word play!

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2010-05-20 05:14 PM

You leave me totally in awe, it is hard not feel you and your poetry.

An emotional write to be sure, and so very well done.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2010-05-20 07:09 PM

I'm so glad I stopped by to read this. It gave me a lopsided grin..

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2010-05-21 04:35 AM

wow

outstanding work!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2010-05-21 05:32 PM

Hi Charly...Sad and a bit bitter...well done...and I'm not talking about what's for dinner.

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

7 posted 2010-05-21 09:23 PM

When you write like this, we all are better for it. It is a level of writing to aspire to and besides that
it's a darn good poem!!!!
In admiration
Liz

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

8 posted 2010-05-22 07:17 AM

Thank you all for your time in reading and for the thoughtful kindness of your comments.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2010-05-22 08:25 AM

Dear Charly, what an extraordinary write! A poem like firework that you can't forget, even if it lasted only seconds. Every word a hit.

Love,
Margherita

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