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Come Into Morning, Stay Into Night (Envelope Couplets)
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Come Into Morning, Stay Into Night (Envelope Couplets) |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy 
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Come Into Morning, Stay Into Night Come into the morning, and stay into night hide in the shadows, and run from the light The welcome within, must show a face stodgy in sadness, and stoic in grace gaze of forgiving and smile of a sprite come into morning and stay into night Come into the morning, and stay into night the desire is emotion that you cannot fight lovingly, tenderly, your face: in my hands show me the wonders of noctural lands sweet dreamer of dreams until the first light Come into the morning, and stay into night (C) Jeff Feezle 3/2010 ------------ These are called 'envelope couplets' where the formula for the rhyming lines are: A1. a. b. b. a. A2 |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Don't want to see this fall off the page already. You write nice, Jeff~ |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
aw, thanx, Lori. Wrote this for Terri's workshop and then my computer crashed. Nice to stay in practice of strutured poetry, right? Take care, L Jeff |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a very enjoyable read. yann |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Thank you Yann, for indulging me! Jeff |
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whisperingwalt Member
since 2010-04-29
Posts 240Coquitlam, BC, Canada |
Cool! It takes a talent to be able to convey what you would like inside of a structure..well done. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
couplets or triplets short or gigantic I like this one simply because it's romantic |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Hey ol Walt! ?Como estas? The format of envelope couplets have a nice sonnet feel to them, and are very pleasing to our rhythm bones! Thanks buddy! Jeff |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
couplets or triplets short or gigantic I like this one simply because it's romantic hehehe, thankx, Martie! Where there is rhyme there is reason. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
 Style and content. I like the feel and flow, and now, the know. I bow to you and yours. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
oh geez don't bow to me, my friend! LOL I ain't even a 'Sir' just jeff. Small j. Thank you, Andrew, for your kindness and sincerity. |
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