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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

0 posted 2010-05-04 08:37 PM

A Woman I'll Call Desire

On Friday nights
when the women put
on their party dresses,
my eyes open wider
and the world seems
a little brighter
thinking I might
dance the night away
with a woman I'll
call desire.

JamesLee
02May
2010

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2010-05-04 09:13 PM

Yo James,

This sounds like a good idea. Friday nights are like that.

Bobby

Earl Brinkman
Senior Member

since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

2 posted 2010-05-04 09:41 PM

What a line! With a woman a call desire!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2010-05-04 09:58 PM

Your writing is growing in
its succinct tone. I think that
deserves a "bravo!"

LindsayP
Member Elite

since 2007-07-28

Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria

4 posted 2010-05-05 10:10 PM

What a cute poem James and I sure like the

way your thinking. Good luck my friend.

Lindsay

Eusta B. Mae
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since 2010-05-03

Posts 903

5 posted 2010-05-07 11:55 AM

I like this alot! ebm

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

6 posted 2010-05-08 10:30 AM

enjoyed

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

7 posted 2010-05-08 12:19 PM

A fine write... but the question is... what will you call her the morning after?

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

8 posted 2010-05-08 12:20 PM

Loved this....made me smile...nicely done

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2010-05-11 09:06 PM

Thank you Robert, Earl, Sunshine, Linsay, Eusta, vandana, Andrews and Lee J for the wonderful responses...Thats an easy one Andrew, I'd call her "Desired"...James

srizah
Junior Member

since 2010-05-03

Posts 34
India

10 posted 2010-05-14 12:21 PM

Nice piece and I liked your riposte to Andrew

~srizah~

Live Life!

whisperingwalt
Member

since 2010-04-29

Posts 240
Coquitlam, BC, Canada

11 posted 2010-05-14 12:51 PM

Very nice...good flow...creative ending.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

12 posted 2010-05-14 07:17 AM

I really like this a lot, James. It's simple and classic, like a little black dress that is always sexy and never goes out of style.

Bravo, m'friend.

Lamar Cole
Member

since 2009-05-01

Posts 274

13 posted 2010-05-14 09:40 AM

Nice.

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

14 posted 2010-05-14 12:19 PM

impressive, so charming and emotional, the essence of love....

regards

yann

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