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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2010-04-27 03:11 AM

Brown and distorted like old winter leaves
hopes, wishes, needs, litter the ground
where once dew drops foretold happiness
in their own unique glitter and shine.

Trees acquiesce to the chill of the times
and adopt a grave and sombre repose
as a way of convincing the inbred beautiful
to sleep away grief until born again.

The blue of the sky retreats hastily
to wait beyond the reach of all fears
and the clouds inflate with ominous grey
to prevent the advance of the untenable.

There in that dark and cold landscape
no birds can ever be heard or seen
and the wind refuses to usher in
a fresh breath of encouraging air.

I stand as a witness not distant, apart,
but one embroiled in the matters of heart
on fire and burning within where it hurts
and blackens the gold of belief.

I stand, yes, but do teeter so
when dispirited by the march of turmoil
that has no regard, no respect, no love,
for what was intended to be!

Helen / 27 April 2010

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

1 posted 2010-04-27 02:39 PM

ms bunch..I came back to this one after reading it yesterday. Needed to feel it again and it conjurs the searing empty almost of a poe or byron..yet it burns like the itch of a new tattoo...I see you alone but nearly smothered at the same time...very kewl vibes in this.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

2 posted 2010-04-27 02:49 PM

Mr. Dark - Thank you for reading. You are most perceptive and I'm now satisfied that the poem, or "story" as I refer to my writing, was able to be correctly interpreted. Thank you so very much for that.

Helen

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2010-04-27 04:23 PM

I felt this one deeply, Helen and it is one of my favorites now.

M

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2010-04-28 01:38 PM

Thank you, Maureen.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2010-05-01 09:33 PM

Fine writing...James

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