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Open Poetry #46

OH CHILD, OH CHILD

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since 2006-04-29

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0 posted 2010-04-25 12:20 PM

OH CHILD, OH CHILD

oh child,
oh child,

you stumble
toward me
like the drunken uncle
who staggered
through my childhood

and from
your excited mouth
come mumbling
echoes
of my mother’s
nursing home bed

you reach
my outstretched hands
and in your smile
I see
the miniature tombstone
of your solitary
tooth

oh child,
oh child,
throw your arms
around my neck,
there is much
for you to teach me,
and much
I would forget

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Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

1 posted 2010-04-25 03:25 AM

Powerful poem that I can relate to in some way.
Ida

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

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Between the Lines

2 posted 2010-04-25 06:00 PM

your words are very touching~~

M

Trapped - Nothing
Member

since 2010-04-25

Posts 52

3 posted 2010-04-26 09:43 AM

Yes, your words are very touching. But I can't relate. a tombstone for your solitary tooth. pretty but again. where are you going with these lines.

I like that you address a child with sacrasm its tawdry.

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since 2006-04-29

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4 posted 2010-04-26 09:58 AM

Hi TRAPPED-NOTHING. The solitary tooth of the child is similar in shape to a tombstone and in the context of this poem it serves as a reminder that mortality is a condition of human life.. Regards, Tony

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2010-04-28 10:55 PM

Very powerful and masterful use of theme and comparison of tombstone and a child's solitary tooth - very clever and emotionally effective....Anthony, this is one of your best!

OldBuddyOldPal
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since 2008-12-15

Posts 87

6 posted 2010-04-29 06:19 AM

excellent..great imagery with the tooth and tombstone as it relates to this poem

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

7 posted 2010-04-29 07:35 AM

Excellent. The tooth and the tombstone were stand outs.

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