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Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2010-04-23 12:19 PM

Abstract Random

In every sense
I've been catergorized
And filed away

You call me insane
With scattered memories
and forsaken dreams

But all these pieces
I can rearrange em
And change my small world

You don't understand
But I am in control
And you can't keep me

I am too wild
And unpredictable
To even listen

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

N|D|N|C|Lost-Poet
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since 2009-07-30

Posts 360
New Orleans

1 posted 2010-04-23 04:47 AM

Beautifully Captured

Chalmette Guy
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since 2009-03-11

Posts 1257
Louisiana

2 posted 2010-04-23 08:33 AM

Is it sane to be called insane, or to realize that you are?
Well done. Great stuff Juju.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2010-04-23 09:58 AM

me too girl

Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2010-04-23 01:01 PM

Yo Juju,

There you go Hon.

Love Bobby

MorningStar
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since 2009-10-26

Posts 290
Pittsburgh, Pa

5 posted 2010-04-23 01:12 PM

That's right.

If I don't say it...who will?

Laverne Pacquire
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since 2009-11-15

Posts 96

6 posted 2010-04-23 05:49 PM

I am too wild
And unpredictable
To even listen

This reminds of a passage in the bible i forget which one but it refers to someone being of spirit and how this person is unpredictable like the wind, you don't know if they are coming or going ;but they are of an incredible spirit no one can avoid this person.

its a beautiful passage. these three lines made me think of this person with spirit.

take care

Andrew Scott
Member Elite

since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

7 posted 2010-04-23 06:29 PM

An excellent piece.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

[This message has been edited by Andrew Scott (04-23-2010 11:04 PM).]

Zeigeist
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since 2009-12-09

Posts 311
Michigan

8 posted 2010-04-23 09:43 PM

liked it...real smooth.

Z.

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

9 posted 2010-04-24 10:35 AM

We have to resist evertime we think, thanks for the excellent write, a very trustful share...

regards

yann

Trapped - Nothing
Member

since 2010-04-25

Posts 52

10 posted 2010-04-26 10:22 AM

Robert Frost never wrote poems like this.
I think he hated it because its was simple and not filling to the senses.

I also think this poem is not filling to the senses, to be honest, its horrible.

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

11 posted 2010-04-26 02:49 PM

No I am not Robert Frost, but I am full of myself.

Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thoughts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

Earl Brinkman
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since 2010-03-03

Posts 1183
Osaka, Japan

12 posted 2010-06-09 09:12 PM

The disparity between a state of agitation an asserted self control leaves the reader with a sense that the protagionist is deluding himself. A nice write if perhaps an incorrect interpretation on the part of the reader. Words often have two meanings.

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