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Rain Dogs
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Rain Dogs |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan 
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Rain Dogs I really don't care if my glasses are broke, life is pretty dirty to be looking at anyways. I just follow my feet down my well worn path. Nothing new is coming, same old stories with new clothes is all. I have hope whenever it rains, that it will change, that something new will wash up, but it's just the waste of another day. I sleep in the doorways, I lost the smell of life. Just me and the other rain dogs, scratching our asses and waiting. Zeitgeist. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
I liked this for lots of reasons. Raw, edgy...an indelible pulse still beats after the words take their leave. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Quite the melancholy, dark piece here BUT I love it, it's very cleverly expressed and the use of metaphors and theme packs a powerful punch. I loved the ending, didn't expect it, it's powerful but also made me chuckle....which isn't a bad thing at all  You've got talent! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Gritty and real. A quality piece. I particularly liked those first and last four lines, but the whole is surely greater than the sum of its parts. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
thank you Kathy for your kind reply Z. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
got my attention I like it |
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Zeigeist Member
since 2009-12-09
Posts 311Michigan |
Thank you all. What great people here at PIP. Zeitgeist |
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