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A Love Poem For No One Special
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A Love Poem For No One Special |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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A Love Poem For No One Special ~ If numb is a reminder of how far acceptance is from understanding then I’ve accepted that I don’t love you. No I don’t love you anymore I don’t miss you and I don’t know you - I know now that I never did. Somewhere along the way we left behind the lightness of living and became the dullness of scars that breathe like stone. I left you tears sometimes though you never took the time to understand what they meant. And I only ever wanted to say that I never loved in vain yet you and I know that the mind cannot make the heart understand. The truth is I tried too hard to turn this lie into something real. I tried but never found your affection anything other than arduous, your praises shallow, your promises reckless; And it has become painfully obvious that you only loved me with the originality of a cheap romance novel. But you were young and so was I and our lessons learned will become a remarkable coldness. I don’t love you anymore I’m not sure I ever did then again denial is comforting and my lesson learned will seem like a slow disease wanting only the familiarity of you. No, don’t let this sadness touch you nothing of value is lost neither of us truly loved with full abandon I only thought I did and you only wanted to. ~ By Melissa Long-Monette For Tony... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Wow, Melissa! I'm not much of a free verse fan, but this is one POWERFUL poem! Holy smokes! I am truly stunned by the similes and metaphors, and the incredible emotions that dragged this poem out of your soul. Whew! Tony, you've lost thru your carelessness what you could have had with a kind word and strong commitment. I hope you read this poem and note where you could be better. |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wowsers! I felt sure by the title you were just writing a poem for Toerag and LongJohn, since you had written one for me. Exceptional writing, m'lady. The only thing better than your rhyme is your free verse and the only thing better than your free verse is your rhyme. You have it all.. I think Tony will get the message. Too bad he didn't get it before.. |
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Chalmette Guy Senior Member
since 2009-03-11
Posts 1257Louisiana |
I too, thought this was written for me, "no one special". lol Really, I think this is one of your best. It truly is profound and speaks to us all that has been in love we thought, and then have the wisdom to look back on it later and realize maybe we weren't. But the experience was still something worth savoring right? I love these lines: I left you tears sometimes though you never took the time to understand what they meant. And I only ever wanted to say that I never loved in vain yet you and I know that the mind cannot make the heart understand. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Once again, I am awed by the exceptional writing you present. I really think you need to change your comment about becoming a "true poet." If this isn't poetry at some of its best, then what I'm writing must be pure drivel (as opposed to the tainted drivel it is).  I bow to you and yours. Peace."We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"Somewhere along the way we left behind the lightness of living and became the dullness of scars that breathe like stone." marvelous work |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A pleasure to read...James |
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