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The Ghost Ship: HMS Regret
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The Ghost Ship: HMS Regret |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ghosts upon a failing ship Cast adrift In stagnant seas Seeking echoes Of spirits For that which never was Crewed by haunted thoughts While wondering what if In counterpoint To what is Its cargo of regret Carries no weight But the sinking ship In the sea of memories Choices without preserve A line not worth towing But difficult in the letting go For once grasped It pulls under And offers no safe harbor Only stormy seas And bottomless depths The life vest is best "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Andrew, Don't go near that ship. Bobby |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Got my vest right here, thank you very much. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I have missed you, my friend... This is wonderful! That's an anchor that drags at us all! *S* |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ah, Lady Suthern... it is a pleasure to see you as well. Thank you for gracing my humble offering. Hope all is well in your neck of the woods. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Terrific metaphor, Andrew. I could see the ship and easily related it to the real message you gave. The flow was done really well. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
YO! LJA... thanks for the read and write. I'm glad there are those from the early years still about... and those who still remember this fool of a poet. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Kethry D Member
since 2010-04-12
Posts 64Australia |
I could vsmell the briny deep in this and I too think life vests are the best. A poet must leave traces of his passing not proof. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
You worked that metaphor to perfection! |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A line not worth towing But difficult in the letting go I have to agree. You made the metaphor magical. Very well done, sir. It also explains why my marriage failed. My wife was a little dinghy!  |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Honeybee, I bow to you and your's in thanks. Sir Balladeer... My wife is my life vest... a little dinghy at times, but far better than drift wood. Not that I'm any better.  "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I loved the cadence, its flow, and the metaphor itself...very nicely written but I must confess you caught me off guard with this line: "Its cargo of regret Carries no weight" ...it works well...I just hadn't expected that direction |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Steavenr: I can see how these lines might throw you off kilter, considering one often associates regret with a very heavy burden. However, I was thinking more in the context of cargo having worth and regret having no substance, thus no value or weight… yet, still heavy enough to cause a sinking ship. Thanks for looking in and pondering. I appreciate the time and consideration. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Andrew! You're married to Mae West????? |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Haaaa... more like the Unsinkable Molly Brown. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Andrew...good to see you here. Keep that life vest! |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Martie: She be wrapped nice an’ tight, and buckled to boot. Thar ain’t be no way I be lettin’ go, no matter the stormy seas and wind tossed waves. I be hangin' on for dear life... for she be my wife.  It's good to be seen by such as you. Peace. "We'll chase them like rats across the tundra." |
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