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steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

0 posted 2011-02-23 02:14 PM

I called you Susanna today
oh...I know you are a Suzy, and...
just that it comes out that way
because I still see you as Susanna

you asked me if I ever saw you
like the bride in father of the same
and I told you no, but it wasn't so
because I hide you behind your name

Suzy's all grown up and doesn't
conjure up the memories that
I recall of what was and wasn't...
of long-stockings and a favorite hat

Susanna was my little, but grown-up gal
while Suzy's grown up more than just a little
more than I would like to admit for now
as through the years I try to muddle

through memories and bygone times
of school days and fashion shows
of nursery years and nursery rhymes
of nickel toys and hair-top bows

no longer pinks and mostly black
the bows are gone, but not the hats
just twenty-four days---then I give you away
only one request and I hope it's okay

I'll still call you Susanna, if you don't mind
'cause you'll never be Suzy in this old mind

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-02-23 02:38 PM

Steaven,this is wonderful. You have taken us inside "father of the bride" and how sweet the view.
Lori

faithmairee
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since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-02-23 04:25 PM

such a tender and loving poem...i really like how beautifully you expressed yourself here...

great poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Juju
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since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

3 posted 2011-02-23 05:04 PM

I like this one.

Juju

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2011-02-23 05:09 PM

awww, steaven.

This has quite a sweet pang to it.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2011-02-23 06:12 PM

Lori, thank you...I've truly relived the Spencer Tracy/Steve Martin role (depending on your generation) a lot lately. In twenty-four days, I can concentrate on missing her for real...right now it's sometimes hard to distinguish the past from the present

Faith, 'cause I'm such a tender guy

...he smiles sheepishly. Thank you for reading. I appreciate it.

Juju, thank you for liking this...obviously, it is very close to my heart right now

serenity, thank you...haven't had a chance to pang sweetly in a while...isn't that from the song..."sweet pang, you make my heart sang...you make everythang...groovy" (and for the children among us...groovy is still cool)

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2011-02-24 10:18 PM

Wonderful bit of inner relating, steavenr, and you did good. Bad English, but my heart was there, buddy.

~ Give a person a fish and you feed them for a day. Teach a person to use the Internet and they won't bother you for weeks ~

Spiros Zafiris
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since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

7 posted 2011-02-25 01:32 AM

..thanks for this heartfelt
poem..>spiros

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2011-02-25 02:19 AM

Very touching Steaven
I remember the day I gave mine away.
It was a happy time for her and I looked at her the same way you are in this delightful fatherly composition.
The memories of those times will always be there and they're soothing.
Now I am awaiting the birth of my first grandchild and that will be another happy time.
So it goes and we get to write about it.

Wish her the best and congrats to her.

Eric

oxymoron....Rap Music

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

9 posted 2011-02-25 01:35 PM

Silly tears for lots of reasons, but I am happy for you all. Enjoyed your poem too.

Owl

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

10 posted 2011-02-25 04:18 PM

Jerry, thank you...have re-written this several times and understand what you mean about the bad English...wasn't even going to post this, but found it necessary (at least, hopefully) to get the wrinkles out of it...thanks for commenting

spiros, thank you for reading...I appreciate it

Eric, thank you, but the sad part is that I’m not new to the wedding thing...My other daughter has been married for 15 years (and though it was difficult) I am sure that this one is harder because she is the baby...baby

25 years old...wow...thank you for the best wishes

Owl, thank you for reading...and thank you for sharing your wishes for happiness

twistedpup
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since 2011-02-25

Posts 115

11 posted 2011-02-25 05:34 PM

this is quite the poem. it brought me to another world. wow.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

12 posted 2011-02-25 07:10 PM

welcome, twisted pup...interesting name / thanks for the generous comment

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

13 posted 2011-02-25 07:33 PM

Wishing your family every happiness and a joyful future for your daughter, It is hard to see your children strike out on their own, even under the best of circumstances.
This poem is a great wedding present that I am sure your daughter will cherish always.
Ida

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