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extra ordinary days |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Some bring me fruit and flowers. Every day's an anecdote. A cautious tassel on our drapes reveals the sunlight welcoming. I strong-arm the door for them - a growling Annie's by my side. Ever-eager Freddy is consigned to terrier, again. "My Hero --Alpha Dog!!" I lie. "I am, " he whines. I laugh. He sighs. "Of course you are." pat-pat-him-sweet He wags the rug in smug placation. Friends are different these days - orbs are present in their eyes. A haunting to be sure, I know, I look at them and say goodbye. Silently acknowledging I can't correct what has transpired. So I wish them well as they walk their narrow, spindle-gait There be dragons that prevail I lock the door - security, and I decide to sweep the floor. Superstitiously--bad luck-- Take that with you, Mutha-wruck! I will pray this day away. Love is in the flickering tealights and my potpourri bubbles in the caldron we keep hidden by the ficus tree that twinkles with blue lights. Nothing's on the stove tonight. The cat is dying quietly. "Layla" makes the pain alright and Clapton is great company singing sad sobriety of one too many apertif. Grief sings out the sixteenth note and I am silenced by the weight of memories I'd thought remote: extra ordinary days... * * * I had much help re-working this repost, from friends in the now-defunct Critical Analysis Forum. I extend my gratitude to them all once again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You take extra ordinary days/memories/emotions/poems.... and make them brilliant!!! Your writing is magic, and so much more than that!!! |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
brilliant...simply brilliant...just love this There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you both so much. Ordinary days are my favorite. If you take an ordinary day and celebrate it--it becomes a holy day. This one is dear to my heart, so I appreciate the appreciation. It's just me and Freddy now, so I'm gonna go hug my mutt. He is finally, truly Alpha Dog.  Thanks again, and thanks to doreen, who made me remember this'n.  |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Your poems always go deep and leave a lasting impression, Karen. Ida |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
quote: ~this struck deep and extraordinary chords ~~in me~~~ ~write-on~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, this was beautiful to the core although the part about your kitty dying is wrenching chunks out of my heart. I understand that this is about a while back, but still . . . And, of course, I ache for the Annie part but know she is happy upstairs with Flicka, Tigger and Daisy and all your previous animals. And of course I particularly love the Freddy part, especially as I have a photo of the beautiful gorgeous guy. I, too, love ordinary days the best, and what is more, I love loving ordinary days - not that I have many of them, more's the pity (like today - had copper thieves stealing 2 of my water pipes and came home to water bursting out of them - apparently they had been doing so for 4 hours - so lots of water lost and water bill will be high next month, and pipes to replace will be expensive, bearing in mind that 2c to me is expensive - no water tonight as it was too late for the plumber to do even a temporary job, but will fix it tomorrow - I am rambling). And I LOVE what you did with the title! Owl [This message has been edited by OwlSA (02-25-2011 05:32 PM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well done Karen! Images are really vivid and the mood is clearly expressed. Love the Layla part, but of course I always would....smile... Love the apertif part too because it all fits together so well. Take Care Eric oxymoron....Rap Music |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Grief sings out the sixteenth note" ...I loved it all, but I really liked this line |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I might have missed the first rounding but I love that you had placed it in Analysis, and I wish that were back, because it taught me a lot! This...is my favorite part, but then, I have always believed in magic: quote:It sings! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I've drank my wine before bedtime, taking my cold medicine which has knocked me for a friggin' loop. I said all that to apologize for making this short. A kickass piece of work, Serenity. ~ Give a person a fish and you feed them for a day. Teach a person to use the Internet and they won't bother you for weeks ~ |
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Nareena Member
since 2011-02-17
Posts 51BC, Canada |
Enjoyed this... made me miss my dog though  Give yours a hug for me  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Karen I want to say something profound, but I am still to caught up in the magic of this poem. If I hadn't already liked you, I would for sure now. Damn girl, this is brilliantly wonderful. Alison |
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