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Open Poetry #47

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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2011-02-22 05:36 PM

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Dusk light
Beyond the trees
Over a somber bay

Offshore
Small islands
In dark silhouette
Last flights
Of sparrows
Passing by

Silence comes
To bring
The curtain down
There are no words
For us to say

Let there
Be no thought
Of loss regret
Or tragedy

As we listen
As if finally
To the lapping
Of the sea

.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2011-02-22 07:33 PM

excellent, john.

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

2 posted 2011-02-22 08:07 PM

Nice one!
Kat >^..^<

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2011-02-23 05:22 AM

Beautifully written and expressed.
Ida

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

4 posted 2011-02-23 06:26 PM

...can you say good-bye more majestically than this write conveys...another excellent offering

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

5 posted 2011-02-23 07:27 PM

A rhythmic lapping.

blankmirrors
Junior Member

since 2010-07-16

Posts 14

6 posted 2011-03-06 11:27 PM

Feelings and thoughts beautifully expressed through your lines. I like the underlying discreetness of your writing style. Best wishes.

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