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She climbed
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She climbed |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa 
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She climbed the stairs and counted not a thousand but much less yet still enough to take her up to a vantage point and she surveyed the landscape dry-eyed like one unmoved. In the distance there were mountains blue, blue, it seemed to her like love confined immobile in a cage of self-destruction and she brought the air in, in, in, like a plea for love's release. She turned then and walked away to where the grass was green and where the water tumbled free hot, hot, like passion, lust, from within the bowels of earth. She settled in that stream to be self-contained and satisfied that once a plea intoned she simply had to be distanced from the mountains blue dry-eyed as she was then. And then she went down, down, down, into the depths of heart and soul to arise a woman free and clear from deep emotive love but there in those watery depths you'll find the tears she cried. Helen / 22 February 2011 |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
She settled in that stream to be self-contained and satisfied that once a plea intoned she simply had to be distanced from the mountains blue dry-eyed as she was then. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There you go!! Love it, love it, love it!! Your visuals are beautiful and the message is a poignant one. Lovely poem, Helen~ |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, dear Bluesy. It was going to be a Sunday story because today felt like a Sunday but then I remembered it was Tuesday and somehow or other a Tuesday story just didn't cut it. So glad you enjoyed. Love Helen |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
Very beautifully crafted - this reader is dry-eyed, yet touched. The air,though.... One must draw breath, must be alive, to be able to shed tears. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thanks easy1. I guess the writer was also dry-eyed but touched for a time but, unfortunately, not for all of the time. Helen |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
great one Helen! the imagery was wonderful! Lori |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Lori. After the climb, the down and down for me now means "hitting" my bed. Goodnight from South Africa. Helen |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Sometimes tears paves the way to freedom. I liked this. ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Helen, you have written a pure gem, emotions are intensely rendered. One of my absolute favorite of yours. Impressive, really! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Thank you, Jerry, James and Margherita for your comments. Certainly much appreciated. It was a very special day outside and inside and needed to be noted. Helen |
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