Open Poetry #47 |
on a rain sent summer's day |
faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
did we not on a rain-sent summer's day sky filled with thunder hide beneath your bolero ground wet with rain inquisitive man that you were then kissing first my eyelids then slowly but surely you kissed my lips pressing your warm body next to my own you trespassed slowly growing bolder with each whimpering sound that found it's way up to my throat somehow you never noticed i was crying did we not discardng your damp bolero wonder when the rain had stopped rolling in the wet grass your laughter filling the air i fully realized what i had only sensed before it wasn't me who filled your soul with longing it wasn't me who filled your heart with joy you called me by another woman's name more times than i care to remember so much for rain-sent summer days There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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katahdin Senior Member
since 2010-07-01
Posts 1196ME. In the Shadow of the Mt. |
Faith this was a beautful poem and I can relate especially to - you called me by another woman's name more times than I care to remember Thanks for sharing Kat >^..^< |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Oops! ~ Life is sexually transmitted ~ |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
Kat-Thank you so much for your lovely comments. I really appreciate them. JerryPat-Oops is right! That rascal!!! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
A sad vignette and well-written, well communicated... Not so fun being treated as a temporary toy, especially in such a superb setting, or what should be so. We somehow have to be able to tell the worthy from the unworthy regardless of milieu. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Faith, you're killing me here..you are breaking my heart...Jeeze I hate that for you. Good write-too good. Lori |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh I like this very much, the angst of it all is painful for sure. Although I sense a rainbow in the making from the tears and the rain falling. Great poem, Faith~ |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
Thank you all for your lovely comments and the compliments. There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
The poem was sweet and sad for such a men to not notice something loving as you by his side. Simply enjoyed. |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
Thank you for you wonderful remarks. That's very sweet. There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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