Open Poetry #47 |
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My Love for Thee |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
The depths of love in pleasant pathways fresh, Pristine in virtue’s song and strained by time As strides of strength and persevering mesh To one as one in sweet accord sublime. The heights of love in ecstasy surreal, Unspoiled by saddened dreams retained or spent On that which hastens sorrow’s wintry chill Yet waits in silent calm as love is lent. The breadth of love in fanciful delight, Untouched by measurements of mirthlessness In blissful joys beyond the range of sight As anguish gives it place to joyfulness To measure that which cannot measured be, To tell degrees of all my love for thee. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Enjoyed. ![]() (I confess I stumbled a bit on the first line--I kept trying to re-stress the word, "pleasant". Um. ![]() I found this lovely, as form is refreshing when none is about. ![]() I curtsy. ![]() |
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bel1e Senior Member
since 2006-07-24
Posts 1631 |
this is lovely~~~ |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
What a beautiful lovesong! Owl |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
serenity, I must have re-written that one line more times than all the other lines combined...and that word "pleasant" most of all (maybe I embedded the stress of it) ![]() bel1e, thank you kindly (I appreciate it) Owl, that is such a kind comment...many thanks |
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easy1 Senior Member
since 2010-05-22
Posts 1209Southeastern USA |
A lovely English sonnet (if I am not mistaken). One might try "driv'n-giv'n" for "spent-lent", as I'm not sure love lent isn't fakin'... ![]() |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
easy1, thank you...you are correct on the form...thank you for the suggestion on 'lent', but I used it on purpose based on this definition: 3. add something transitive verb to give a particular quality or character to something example: The candles lend an air of intimacy to the room. |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Great sonnet (my favorite form). I did not seem to have an issue with "pleasant"; however, "lent" seemed a bit out of place. I understand your reasoning for it though, and within that context, it fits in fine. Good work. CG |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
this is beautiful...i love the last line....great poem There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
this is beautiful, some words like pleasant and lent are familiar to my french mind...Thanks for the excellent love expression. yann |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
CG, thank you for reading and commenting...after I posted my reply as to why I used 'lent' I knew there had to be a deeper reason than a textbook definition (probably more discussion on a single word than the word merits) for why I used that word. I do word studies all the time (I am a pastor & a great fan of the AV King James Bible) so I checked out its usage because I tend to use a lot of phrasing common to that beautiful version of Scripture. When I did, I realized why 'lent' was so easy for me to use...the Hebrew word that is translated for lend is used mostly for the type of request that expects fulfillment. We can't get that level of nuance in English and though English is an extremely common language, it is just that...common at times. Forgive me for waxing verbose, and once again, thank you. Faith, thank you...I wondered if it would make sense...thank you for noticing it yann, thank you for your 'French perspective'...I always read your work looking for that perspective...always enjoyable |
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