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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

0 posted 2011-01-08 03:10 PM

I wish I hadn't done it
I wish it were undone
I want to take it back
but the damage is
already done
I want to take it back
not knowing
how far back to go
or which one to take back...
This is all I know
I wish I hadn't
bit the apple
opened the box
answered the phone
or hung that skeleton there
I should have left
those cats and worms
in their bags and cans
let enough and well alone

LGR(c) 1/8/11

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2011-01-08 03:14 PM

Sorry, too late!!
Time to build a new home fire.

Don't know anyone who hasn't felt this way one time or another.

This is very clever and I like how you sewed the cliches into the thought.
AND! I'm not taking that back!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

2 posted 2011-01-08 03:26 PM

Thanks Eric! always enjoy your commentary!
Lori

Quiet One
Junior Member

since 2001-01-01

Posts 46
Shhhhh

3 posted 2011-01-08 04:18 PM

Sure wish life had a little button, marked, "Do Over"

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

4 posted 2011-01-08 10:52 PM

No do over buttons, but there is a "do better" button!

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Legacy
Member

since 2011-01-08

Posts 60
Louisiana

5 posted 2011-01-08 10:58 PM

Funny in a sad sort of way.

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

6 posted 2011-01-09 12:46 PM

ah, i can almost feel the regret, Lori. But you did make a good poem out of it. This is very cleverly written and i like it alot!

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

7 posted 2011-01-09 01:41 AM

I can relate to this ... and I learned my lesson too

clever write

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2011-01-09 11:14 AM

No way, dear Lori! Sometimes we bite our lips in regret for what can't be undone, but experience has many facets and they are all useful for our growth!

Very well expressed thoughts.

Love,
Margherita

incwrite
Member

since 2010-12-31

Posts 55
new york

9 posted 2011-01-09 02:05 PM

thoughts and words timed perfectly. Sorry to say I have been there many times. I call it foot in the mouth syndrome...lol

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

10 posted 2011-01-09 06:35 PM

...ahhh....regret and remorse...you've woven your words so well...nicely, very nicely done

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

11 posted 2011-01-09 07:54 PM

I know I will hear this in live
and well time...it's good.

Your improvements are remarkable.

You're thinking now. Not just spitting...
but thinking.

AlCowie
Member

since 2011-05-13

Posts 92
London, UK

12 posted 2011-05-16 09:15 AM

One of the most enjoyable poems I've read here. Ain't it the truth though!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

13 posted 2011-05-16 09:19 AM

Funny. Funnier. Funny as hell. Oh, hell isn't supposed to be funny.

~ Plastic surgeons are always making mountains out of molehills. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

14 posted 2011-05-16 09:21 AM

AlCowie- you are way too kind and generous in your praise and you have many others to read yet. Bless your heart for popping these poems up to the top again.
Lori

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