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Richy
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since 2003-05-03

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0 posted 2011-02-11 09:00 PM

Hurry Up And Stop

O dear poems,

how you try your best
to define me,
with letters and spaces,
that end up
caging me
like winds of chains
that bite
onto bricks.

It’s not working
too good so far,
is it ?

There’s this shortage
of meanings
yet
to be defined,
that are needed
still
to describe how it feels
when I think
of you
in my arms,
at night.

But keep scribblin
dear pen
please,
just keep,
keep scribblin.

I’m counting on
you
to figure this out,
to help me
comprehend
what lies under
where I stand,
and to help me
percieve
what will be,
of what I leave.

Like why
do we have to be
separate banks
of the same
stream ?

And why can’t
I flood you
with love
so that we can
become
together,
as one creek
bed,
both unto
each other.

Why can’t
my god forsaken
questions
ever,
be as simple as
the answers?

Like the blind man
who looks
at a rainbow,
my soul
anymore,
only sees
in black and white

People always say,
to follow
your heart,
maybe
that’s the problem
since my heart is
now
one big
scar.

I just want
to be the sun
that brings the ripeness
to your
vineyard.

I want to be
the sweet nectar
that dribbles
from your lips
and drips
slowly,
off your chin.

Let the thorns
of your rose
scratch my chest
dear love,
and rip open
my breath.

And drench me
pure
with your shadow
of gold
and cinnamon,
in satin waves
as we choke the silence
out of the air
till your box springs
turn to summer,
so loud
that after,
the neighbors will need
to smoke.

Feed me
my love
plump grapes
as I pull the arms
back
of logic
spanking the rationale
from its stern,
over
and over
as we tug
and undulate,
and flip,
and fluctulate,
as the moon
blushes
behind
gleaming clouds.

Its kind of funny
how I’ve spent
so much time
swimming to you,
that it wasn’t until
my last breath
that I realized,
I maybe could have
had you
had I only stopped,

and turned around.

Before I ever
drowned
in my own river,
I was
my river.

Sometimes
losing
a dream
makes you wiser,
than finding
a truth.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2011-02-11 09:06 PM

Its kind of funny
how I’ve spent
so much time
swimming to you,
that it wasn’t until
my last breath
that I realized,
I maybe could have
had you
had I only stopped,

and turned around.

Before I ever
drowned
in my own river,
I was
my river.

Sometimes
losing
a dream
makes you wiser,
than finding
a truth.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

All that makes me feel like I'm losing altitude.

Such a beautiful, dizzy kind of feeling you make me feel.

What a gift your writing is. Please don't stop.

x/o

Richy
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

2 posted 2011-02-11 09:21 PM

Where are you at Bluesy, about 20,000 feet?

Don't worry, I'll catch you... just like a piece of snow drifting from a dream...

only thing is, I'll keep writing, but I get to keep the snowflake.

Thanks dear friend, that was a very sweet thing to say.

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

3 posted 2011-02-12 12:15 PM

i'm blown away...your diction is great and the flow is wonderful...a praise-worthy poem

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

4 posted 2011-02-12 12:24 PM

"Sometimes
losing
a dream
makes you wiser,
than finding
a truth."

Does one, can one, ever lose a dream? I think it just sits in the heart and grows until to seed it goes and then easily, so easily, sprouts up again.

"Of wisdom" said the wise man, "it comes and then it goes just like a dream a dreamer dreams when all the facts unknown."

Your poem is ... beautiful.

Helen

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

5 posted 2011-02-12 12:43 PM

Thank you Faith, I really appreciate your supporting words!

Richy
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Posts 3050

6 posted 2011-02-12 12:52 PM

Dear Helen, that means alot from someone who's heart is as beautiful as your's.

Dreams are like stars...you may never touch them, but if you follow them they will lead you to your destiny...

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2011-02-12 08:01 AM

"had I only stopped,

and turned around."

Wow, Richy, so may good lines and thoughts I would have to repeat the whole poem~~

Just wanted you to know that I need to save this since it has such real meaning to me,
(a best of yours for sure!)

M

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

8 posted 2011-02-12 12:57 PM

Thanks so much Maureen, you always have such sweet things to say!

Richard

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

9 posted 2011-02-13 03:04 PM

The soul of a poet is a delightful thing to behold, Rich.
Ida

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

10 posted 2011-02-13 08:44 PM

Dear Ida, that was such a kind thing to say, you are too nice!

Happy Valentines Day to you.
Richard

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

11 posted 2011-02-13 09:26 PM

.hi Richy..another poem to read and
and to say, hmmm, this poetry sings
.>spiros
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Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

12 posted 2011-02-14 12:53 PM

Thanks for your time Spiros, I appreciate it!

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

13 posted 2011-02-16 08:10 PM

Very beautiful.

Owl

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

14 posted 2011-02-16 08:13 PM

Thank you Dianne, I really appreciate it!

Richard

Andrew Scott
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since 1999-06-24

Posts 2558
Redlands,CA,USA

15 posted 2011-02-16 10:05 PM

I would only echo those that have come before. A most excellent read with many a fine line. I really enjoyed the way you wrapped it up. Thanks for sharing your talent with words.

As I often say, "Relax, float down stream." And as a final thought, might I suggest "Goin' Down" by the Monkees.

"We'll chase them like rats across the tundra."

Nareena
Member

since 2011-02-17

Posts 51
BC, Canada

16 posted 2011-02-17 12:47 PM

I had to go back and read this again; I'm still not sure I got the entire feel of it, I may have to read it for a third time.

Enjoyed this very much

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

17 posted 2011-02-17 01:04 AM

That's okay Nareena, I wrote it and I still don't know what it means... just my mind scribblin words.

So nice to meet you, thanks for the reply!
Richard

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

18 posted 2011-02-17 12:07 PM

I thought that this was my favorite line:

“separate banks
of the same
stream”

until I read this:
“till your box springs
turn to summer,
so loud
that after,
the neighbors will need
to smoke”

Then I got to the last two stanzas…(I love reading your work aloud) and you masterfully brought this write to an amazing close. Triple sigh write…enjoyed it all…hmmm…still sighing with fulfillment...I'm gonna go back to read it again (not reading so I can make a comment this time)...gonna go back for the sheer enjoyment

Martie

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

19 posted 2011-02-17 08:04 PM

Dear Richy's Pen...Please don't stop, for by defining him, I can understand more clearly, myself.

katahdin
Senior Member

since 2010-07-01

Posts 1196
ME. In the Shadow of the Mt.

20 posted 2011-02-18 02:41 AM

Richy - I love your poems and your style. This is one of my favorites! Enjoyed!
Kat >^..^<

To live is to love
To love is to live

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

21 posted 2011-02-18 12:47 PM

Steven you really are much too kind.

Thanks my good friend.
Richard

Richy
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22 posted 2011-02-18 12:51 PM

Oh Martie, you put that so well, that is so right though isn't it. I don't even know if I care to figure out who I am, but reading your work as well has helped me see, so many things, beautiful and wondrous. Thank you for that dear friend.

Richard

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

23 posted 2011-02-18 12:52 PM

Thanks Kat, you are too sweet!

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