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faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

0 posted 2011-02-11 01:10 PM

we all wondered
what she was doing
the day the tornado
raised her house and
then let it down
with overpowering force

it was anyone's guess
what was on the docket
for the day but
one thing was for certain
that woman buried
beneath the debris was
a very vain woman
no one except maybe
a conceited woman
could own all those clothes

no matter now all
that was left of her life
was the silk dresses draped
over the tall lovely pines
leaving us to wonder
well no one really knew her

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

1 posted 2011-02-11 01:25 PM

An interesting visual, with the messed-up building and scattered clothes, but tall and lovely trees remaining

Interesting read!

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

2 posted 2011-02-11 01:39 PM

thanks so much for reading and commenting on my poem...it is based on a true story i heard when i was eight years old...what happened to this woman stayed in my mind year after year and i finally put it down on paper...

the idea that some peole can't escape being judged by outer appearances even in death is the sad part i was attempting to get across

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

3 posted 2011-02-11 02:30 PM

I'm glad you explained it to easy1, Faith, because I was sure confused. I thought for a minute it was a dig on people who were maybe a little more fortunate in life than others. The poem was well-written, especially after I read your interpretation to it.

~ There's nothing worse than desiring more than you are desired.--Justine Cook / "Portrait" ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-02-11 02:37 PM

thanks as always for your comments...i appreciate your honesty regarding your confusion

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

5 posted 2011-02-11 04:12 PM

Money can be so isolating & insulating depending upon.... Good one Girlie!
Lori

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

6 posted 2011-02-11 05:42 PM

Thanks so much, Lori. I appreciate your comments.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

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