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Amaryllis
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since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

0 posted 2011-01-06 10:08 PM

When the failing afternoon
brushes the edge of meadow,
sweeping shadows like ash
with corn-husk fingers,
it`s then he peels the hardened work gloves
from cramping fingers, and walks
the fence-line home.

He does not hurry. The night
approaches like an idea
whose time has come; bit by bit
it overwhelms the valley,
sets the swallows winging
for the barn, the owl`s silent hunt
to swirl the cooling hours.

Ahead, the lamplight glows
with each step brighter, the familiar
beans and coffee beacon
seems to set it`s scented warmth
like a caring palm upon his cheek,
massaging soft the kinks
and knots of day.

But there is always time
to tilt the neck, and contemplate
the scintillating velvet,
close stinging lids and listen -
in the heartland`s theatre,
the sound of miles, cold, content-
he listens.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2011-01-06 10:58 PM

Beautiful images Amaryllis.
I've been an outdoors man all my life and tramped the Canadian forests.
This write of yours perfectly captures the end of day and the satisfying calm that the day's labour and the majesty of nature can bring.
I simply loved this!

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

2 posted 2011-01-06 11:15 PM

Thank you so much, Eric! I`m so glad to read your comment; I`d feared this was maybe `boring` =( Heh! So, much appreciated, my friend.

Best~
Amaryllis

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2011-01-06 11:18 PM

Far from boring, magically serene would be a better description.

Eric

ain't doin nothin at all just answerin the call
and kinda driftin away from it all

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

4 posted 2011-01-07 03:11 AM

loved the imagery in your poem...it almost felt like being there... that's how vivid the pictures were...nice work on this one!

Faith

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

mikeandrew
Member

since 2010-11-18

Posts 198

5 posted 2011-01-07 05:11 AM

wonderful poem enjoyed it very much.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

6 posted 2011-01-07 09:53 AM

Lovely writing, the last verse was exquisite...my fav.
But each that one that came before was a beauty all it's own.

so nice~

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

7 posted 2011-01-07 10:25 AM

Thank you for reading & for your comment, faithmairee

MikeAndrew, thanks so much for looking in

Aw Blues, thank you so much!

You are too kind. Appreciate it!

Amaryllis

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

8 posted 2011-01-07 11:26 AM

Oh wow. this was amazing. It's so clear and enchanting in it's whispering.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· "Look! Crumbs on his jacketses... Heeee took it!"

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

9 posted 2011-01-07 01:02 PM

A'mary...one of those places it would be fun to wake up in..enjoyed it

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

10 posted 2011-01-07 01:10 PM

Scenery and feelings go superbly together here, dear Amaryllis. A very beautiful reading experience.

Love,
Margherita

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

11 posted 2011-01-07 03:03 PM

Amaryllis, I think you have a problem with understanding what the word "boring" means - and there I always thought you were a wordsmith!  Nothing you EVER write, LEAST OF ALL this exquisite evensong, could EVER be described as "boring"!

I popped in to Pip to send today's messages to Linda (Earth Angel) in Announcements, and was in need of . . . well, I wasn't sure what I was in need of, until I read your poem, then I knew that it was exactly this poem.  Thank you.

Please anyone who sees this and doesn't already know how desperately ill Earth Angel is and how in need of our prayers and healing wishes she is, please go into Announcements and send her a message in the thread I posted about her.  I copy the messages every night (about 9pm South African time)and send them to her daughter Shannon, so that Shannon can read them to Linda to help warm her heart and bring healing to her body and even her spirit, as amazing as it is, needs soul food.

I know you won't mind me typing this in my response to your poem, Amaryllis.  You are far too nice to mind.  I have emailed everyone whose email address I have and told them about Linda and the post in Announcements, but I know there are many more people in Pip who love Linda and who don't normally go into Announcements and would like to know and help her heal.

Please spread the word.  I know we would all like Linda to know just how loved she is.

Owl

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

12 posted 2011-01-07 04:06 PM

Thank you, Garan! That`s so nice of you to say..

DS: ha, yes, but it might be a cold night out, should he decide to-!

Margherita, thanks so much always for your support of my writing..it means a lot to me.

Owl, thanks for the nice comments for the poem, and yes! You are right- I don`t `mind` a bit your adding the message concerning Linda (EarthAngel)..! In fact I am so glad you did, as I had somehow missed it...I haven`t popped over to Announcements for so long. I have written a message to that sweet lady, and am hoping/praying much for her comfort and recovery. I think mentioning it in a poem reply post is a great idea, as there may be others like myself, who have not heard yet, but are glad to. Thank you, Owl, for your big ol` heart...you are a special gal, yourself!

My best to all~
Amaryllis

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

13 posted 2011-01-07 04:19 PM

Thanks, Amaryllis, for your message to Linda and your kind words to me.

Owl

threadbear
Senior Member

since 2008-07-10

Posts 817
Indy

14 posted 2011-01-08 12:32 PM

you have it, A,
the ability to put sights sounds smells
into prose.
A glimpse in rune-light.
Jeff

Amaryllis
Senior Member

since 2010-05-20

Posts 1306
Mi now

15 posted 2011-01-08 01:26 AM

Thank you, Jeff, for saying so...that means a lot

A

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

16 posted 2011-01-08 09:12 AM

this is beautifully written and expresses the contentment that I see all around me in this and the surrounding towns.

If only others could feel this~~

M

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

17 posted 2011-01-08 10:45 AM

I'll echo what everyone has said before.

Beautifully done.

-Trina.

When you decide to walk away- walk away. Don't look back, In that moment you'll lose trust and faith- in yourself.

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

18 posted 2011-03-17 04:39 PM

"and walks....the fence-line home." Lovely, as is the entire poem.

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

19 posted 2011-03-17 05:28 PM

What a beautiful, insightful poem you have constructed, Amaryllis.

It brings to mind my grandfather who worked from sunup to sundown all the years I knew him. Had a bell atop a long pole and my grandmother would go out in the yard and ring it to let him know it was mid-day and time to eat.

~ My grandmother is over eighty and still doesn't need glasses. Drinks right out of the bottle. ~

easy1
Senior Member

since 2010-05-22

Posts 1209
Southeastern USA

20 posted 2011-03-18 02:13 PM

This was a worthy topic bump. About all this work is missing is the farewell feel of savoring and releasing a few breaths before turning to go indoors.

It is a much appreciated read, Amaryllis.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

21 posted 2011-03-18 02:22 PM

Ethome took the words right out of my mouth! ~ er, keyboard! Thanks Eric! Now all I have to do is "ditto" your remarks!

Amaryllis, I thoroughly enjoyed this fine piece of writing! Exceptionally vivid!!!

EA

Bastet
Member

since 2010-05-07

Posts 246

22 posted 2011-03-20 04:02 AM

Sharon, you're back with all your poetic magic! I've been looking for you. This poem is a real marvel. Beautiful rural scene with magnificent images ("night approaches like an idea") You really should publish some of these. They're much better than a lot of published stuff I read.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

23 posted 2011-03-22 02:43 AM

You wrote this so beautifully. It's the one that I choose to take to bed with me. Goodnight and sweet dreams.

xoxox
A

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

24 posted 2011-03-22 04:41 PM

Amaryllis....you've painted with a keen and understanding eye, the feelings and surroundings of a days end in this person's life. I'm impressed.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

25 posted 2011-04-03 03:35 PM

I missed this awesome poem, Amarylis. Luckily I went back and found it.
Ida

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