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JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

0 posted 2011-01-29 03:11 PM

it was just past dark-thirty
my mutt pressed for a tour of the neighborhood
grumpily I acquiesced
off we went
streetlights not the best around here
darkness order of the day
took a left
toward the Beauty Boutique
just opened this week
woman outside
could see her from the lights of the shop
talking on the phone
saw her head jerk in my direction
I knew she could only see a dark form
Zoe and I kept walking
toward her
a second before I was going to speak
to reassure her
she ducked into the shop
closed the door
I heard the lock click
I walked by the brightly lit shop
she had positioned herself
in a chair
white slacks, dark blouse
hurriedly flipping through a magazine
there for customers
she wasn't a customer
she was the owner
when Zoe and I strolled by
she recognized me, smiled and nodded
she'd seen me walking my mutt before
besides, I let her cut my hair
I smiled back
We continued on our appointed rounds
thinking
thinking a lot about our little drama
thinking
women have to fear
shadows
men do not
we meet them head-on
cannot blame the woman
for scurrying inside
no, I cannot
but I would hate to have to live that way

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-01-29 03:34 PM

Sucks for me.
Lori

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

2 posted 2011-01-29 03:36 PM

Sorry, Lori.

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ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

3 posted 2011-01-29 06:43 PM

I don't know, some women have tremendously strong character but I have to admit the majority would worry.
However, now days many men would scurry too. You just never know who's standing near you these days.
Crazy how it's all gone isn't it?

I get the point Jerry and it's a good one.

Eric

the assured expectation of things hoped for, the evident demonstration of reality though not beheld

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

4 posted 2011-01-29 06:50 PM

Thanks Eric. Character or no character, most women are not capable of besting a man in a fight. That was the only thing I was bringing out. I think I didn't get the point across. I mean I wasn't demeaning the beautician's character, I merely understood that she was afraid to remain outside the shop as I approached because she couldn't see who was approaching her. Yesterday her husband rigged up a VERY BRIGHT floodlight so that problem is solved..

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~

faithmairee
Senior Member

since 2011-01-05

Posts 1441
Poe Haven, USA

5 posted 2011-01-30 12:08 PM

i like how you handled the subject of your poem...you wrote it true to life...i agree with Eric that the world is changed and you never know who may be near you...i try to stay aware of my surroundings for that reason...

i enjoyed your poem a lot because of the subject...it's different.

There must be a poem in here somewhere.

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

6 posted 2011-01-30 06:38 AM

Hello Faith. Yeah, that was quite a strange feeling that night. I couldn't get the idea out of my mind that women have to flee certain situations. Anyway, thank you for being here.

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JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

7 posted 2011-02-01 06:51 PM

Enjoyed...James

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

8 posted 2011-02-01 07:03 PM

Thanks James.

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latearrival
Member Ascendant

since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

9 posted 2011-02-01 10:44 PM

Your empathy shows, and that is agood thing.Enjoyed. latearrival

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

10 posted 2011-02-01 11:07 PM

Thank you latearrival.

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OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

11 posted 2011-02-02 11:56 AM

I enjoyed your poem (especially the Zoe part), Jerry, and I got your point exactly as you meant it. Actually it's not that bad - we can be cautious without being afraid.

Owl

JerryPat
Senior Member

since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

12 posted 2011-02-02 12:42 PM

I agree, Owl, cautious is a good thing, be it female or male, the times they are fraught with danger.

~ What's The Difference Between Roast Beef And Pea Soup? / Anyone Can Roast Beef. ~

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