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BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2011-01-28 03:48 PM

There is only you and the one I love
the odds are with me
even when they're stacked against me.

Contrasting desires
smooth like satin and chiffon
draped over the other.

In my minds eye you are fireworks
exploding in the night sky
and I am lost in the raining starlight.

My dreams escape me
falling into a restless sleep
leaving me chilled.

Quiet morning after thoughts
lie still
as the sun peeks through the window.

My heart flutters
warming to the embrace
of a love I can't deny.

Piecing together the shape of my heart
that beats wildly to a rhythm
long familiar.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2011-01-28 03:53 PM

Sad, but very beautiful, Blues. I like the new photo.

Owl

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2011-01-28 03:55 PM

I agree with Diana
Sad but beautiful

Eric

Forget the Psychiatrists they just find out all about you and sell you back to yourself!

JerryPat
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since 2010-10-30

Posts 1991
Louisiana/America

3 posted 2011-01-28 03:59 PM

The wordplay here are fantastic. You keep the reader moving from line to line in anticipation. The words spell out the desire and wonderment of love and excitement as in "you are fireworks / exploding in the night sky." Enjoyed very much.

~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

4 posted 2011-01-28 09:05 PM

fine Romanticism ...

love that 'raining starlight' !!

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2011-01-28 09:21 PM

Thank you kindly, good poets! Really appreciate you stopping by.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2011-01-29 05:32 AM

I sometimes feel forever lost while
"Quiet morning after thoughts"
pervade my mind.

M

amk377
Member

since 2009-08-11

Posts 58
South Carolina

7 posted 2011-01-29 08:55 AM

Blue,

LOVE this! Your writing always makes me smile...this was such a lovely writing of love and how it feels to love someone...I have missed your work so much! Looking forward to reading more

Amy

"we have but a moment...only one moment"

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

8 posted 2011-01-29 10:00 PM

I love your writing, Blues, I especially like this "In my minds eye your are fireworks exploding in the night sky and I am lost in the raining starlight." Excellent!
Ida

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
Senior Member

since 2003-10-26

Posts 1105
Watertown, NY

9 posted 2011-01-30 06:47 PM

This is a beautiful view of your heart BlueS

-Trina
You better believe that my sarcasm could piss a happy meal off.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

10 posted 2011-01-30 06:50 PM

so many romantic pictures...so many lovely views...this is stunningly beautiful

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2011-01-31 10:51 AM

babyblue..your heart has a smile tattoo..enjoyed this babe

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

12 posted 2011-01-31 11:10 PM

I thank you all so much for your nice replies.
Makes me very happy to know you were here and that you enjoyed my little poem.

hugs all around!!!

Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30

Posts 3665

13 posted 2011-02-03 07:35 PM

Heartfelt and lovely...i enjoyed reading the thoughts of love written and imparted to all assembled here on these blue pages reading the poetry of BluesSerenade...thank you...

Goldenrose.

Friendship is Love without his wings. Lord Byron.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

14 posted 2011-02-04 12:02 PM

Thank you Goldenrose, appreciate that.

Richy
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since 2003-05-03

Posts 3050

15 posted 2011-02-06 11:31 AM

You know Bluesy, it always seems like a kind of homecoming each time I come back here for a brief visit before I'm carried off to cling underneath some shadow's umbrella. So many new faces, and still, every time I do drift by their is yet another picture of you, even more enchanting then the one before.

What unique relationships we form in this otherly virtual world. People we know only through thoughts that they share, and hopes and fears that they allow us to reach out and touch, with our eyes and embrace with our hearts.

I've never not loved anything you've written, and this one is no exception, it was soft, and it was blue, just like all things beautiful, like the sky, and the sea.

And you.

Richard xx

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

16 posted 2011-02-06 04:12 PM

Richy, thank you so much for being here.
I feel humbled and flattered at the same time by your kind words.

Very much appreciate your visit~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-29

Posts 7115
South Africa

17 posted 2011-02-07 10:39 AM

Dear Bluesy Gal, I always have and always will love your poetry. This one is sitting in my heart!

Helen

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

18 posted 2011-02-07 05:18 PM

Thanks Helen, that was nice of you to say so.

Hugs honey girl~

bel1e
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since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

19 posted 2011-02-09 08:50 AM

ahhh~yes, there is a loveliness in this...like that waking deep breath of morning on a sunny day~~~

~loved it~

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

20 posted 2011-02-09 10:32 PM

You're sweet! Thank you bella~

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