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Approaching Half A Century
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Approaching Half A Century |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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It is smoke and Faberge' lotion, talcum and the way the strap slips down her shoulder as her lipstick prints tissue. She holds her skinny cigarette loosely in her teeth, on side of labial lascivious a shade of lipstick Revlon missed-- she blends, color-coded moods. Lotion on her elbows with massage beneath her fingertips a sip of wine and lick of teeth and dabs of oil in the crease she lifts her breasts, encouraging; she bites her lower lip's defeat She's looking in her own eyes as she yearns for belladonna lies and filters on the sun would shine rosy red compassionate. Her fingernail is manicured less French, and more au natural buffed pink with smiles--ten white moons fluttering wisp hair. "The circles never disappear." She spoke directly to herself. Her eyes answered honestly the truth emotionless dilate: "You would look strange without them now, so just go mock yourself." |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
I absolutely love this honest, down-to-earth appraisal of your phantom female. My line, the one that just did it for me was "she bites her lower lip's defeat." That said it all. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks Jer. I've been reading a bit quietly today, and this one was just on my notepad waiting for me to get in the right mood to tweak it.  Loved your crows. I've got a thing for birds on a wire.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Love the honesty and the gutsy appraisal of the time factor's consequences. Ain't life a hoot when you want to be straight and stolid? Loved it, lots of sharp cutting edges to recreate in the reader's mind. Write on! Eric Forget the Psychiatrists they just find out all about you and sell you back to yourself! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
What a mood I'm in today. It's like having an emotional itch.  *laughing* Love you, E! Thanks for reading. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, you don't need a paint brush and a canvas. You just need words. Sometimes you are an impressionist, sometimes you paint with intricate detail, sometimes you play light against shade - but always, always you hold those who look on your word-paintings in the palm of your hand. Owl |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
as long as I am drinking jack you will always be barely 30 and as long as you sip the wine I will always be tall, drunk and a handfull enjoyed you here lady!! |
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faithmairee Senior Member
since 2011-01-05
Posts 1441Poe Haven, USA |
lots of great lines in your wonderfully penned poem....your ending one was perfect and packed a punch...enjoyed your poem a lot! There must be a poem in here somewhere. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Dearest Diana, DS, and new friend faithmarie-- thanks for taking the peek. I've done a number of these...  And yes, DS, I've done a number of those too. I should quit counting.  My love to you all. |
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