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EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

0 posted 2012-01-13 09:01 PM

No rose of consolation
blooms

last Fall's ivy climbs
a tarnished trellis
slowly choking itself
its shivering buds fall
victim to the iced over carcas
of the meadow's swansong

where you grow ugly
in the butchered earth
under sky filled canopes
draping over
once the fields of plenty
lingering in hospice
begging now the death
to rotting yesterdays

and barely a leaf remains
to skirt the troubled ground
that binds its barren sycamore
to her once beloved Spring
of dimestore love

when I was wrapped
in gifts of platinum
that slowly morph
within the endless sewers
miles beneath
the streams of romance
holding dreams
of schoolgirl folly

[This message has been edited by EmmaRose (01-15-2012 07:49 PM).]

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

1 posted 2012-01-13 09:17 PM

"dimestore love"

Those two words say so very much. I wonder if kids these days would even understand the petticoats and slicked-backed, i.e. Elvis hairdos. Giggling hysterically in a drugstore booth at first love and first heartbreak. No, I'm afraid they wouldn't understand, and that is their loss.

I realize what I commented on and what your poem was about is two entirely scenarios. Still, I got what I got out of your offering, EmmaRose.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways ~*~

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2012-01-13 09:35 PM

Very nice poem, Emma.
The topic is bleak, but you did well with it., and I like the way it reads..
Thank you for it.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

3 posted 2012-01-13 10:39 PM

"dimestore love" I think you've coined a phrase, Emma Rose. Love it. Too much of that kind around these days.
Ida

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2012-01-14 10:44 AM

I'm all-in with Ida.
Enjoyed your write, for me this stanza
brought the point home:

"when I was lost within your platinum
that slowly morphs into the dirty ditches
way beyond a stream of romance, whether
real or schoolgirl pretence."

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2012-01-15 11:47 AM

I read this the other day ... and was impressed, as I am now (did you change the title?).

Such a masterful description of what goes on in love and life from the moment of blooming to the moment of withering.

Brava!

Margherita

EmmaRose
Senior Member

since 2011-03-02

Posts 1376
Midwest

6 posted 2012-01-15 11:53 AM

thanks for your replies, and Yes dear Marguerita I confess I did

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