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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2012-01-04 08:19 PM

Something a little different . . .

Big rig driver made a stop that cold night,
To top off with diesel and eat a bite,
Headed to El Paso with a full load,
On a south Texas dreary mountain road.

She stood to the side of the cafe's door,
He averted his eyes, thought her a (b)ore.
After his meal, he drank a cup of joe,
He drank the coffee and paid what he owed.

She was still there, bent against the cold wind,
"Please, Mister," she said, "I just need a friend."
He did a double take; she was with child,
A desperate soul as she tried to smile.

He loaded her up inside his warm cab,
She said, "Thank you," and her stomach she grabbed.
He went back inside for something to eat,
She gobbled it up and said aren't you sweet.

Now that she was there, what was he to do?
He timidly asked her when are you due?
She said there was no family or friends,
No one in the world for her to depend.

In the mountain range of Guadalupe,
Her labor began, she asked him to pray.
He pulled off the road and shut the rig down,
It was much too far to get to a town.

The baby was coming, it would not wait,
Into the sleeper awaiting her fate,
He tried to help, but it was just his luck,
They were both stuck out there in his old truck.

The blood soaked everything, even her screams,
There was no water, not even a stream.
The baby came and mother died on cue,
How he got through it all he never knew.

He held the squealing, bloody baby girl,
And something inside him started to swirl.
The babe had begun, the odds against her,
The blood-spattered child was only a cur.

In El Paso he made all the right stops,
Hospital for child, and they called the cops.
Mother buried in potter's field so sad,
He claimed the child, saying he was her dad.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

1 posted 2012-01-04 09:23 PM

OMG! the emotion in this is deeply felt, you took me on that journey Jimmy, I was right there beside them - a fantastic write!

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2012-01-04 09:40 PM

Haha! Thank you much and I'll tell Jimmie you spoke well of him too. Just kidding, tracie66, I make those kind of mistakes every so often.

As for the poem, many thanks for you kind words. I tried to put together a novel about a teenager girl and the truck driver, but it hasn't worked out. Maybe I'll pick it back up and try it again.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

3 posted 2012-01-04 09:44 PM

Tugginging at the heartstrings not a dry eye in the house Jerry.

Lori

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

4 posted 2012-01-04 09:46 PM

Hi Lori, thanks for your kind words. You're up late, not used to seeing you on PiP this late. Thanks again.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2012-01-04 10:16 PM

Well, there you go again...
Another great story, very captivating.
Maybe you should try short stories.
This is really a good read.
Enjoyed, Jerry.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

6 posted 2012-01-04 10:19 PM

Appreciate it, JL. I have a few short stories, but wanted to turn this idea into a novel like I told tracie66, but it hasn't happened yet.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

latearrival
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since 2003-03-21

Posts 5499
Florida

7 posted 2012-01-05 01:40 AM

Well written.As I said once to you.I do read,just do not post much. As you can see l often pull an all nighter even thought I finally quit working.jo

bel1e
Senior Member

since 2006-07-24

Posts 1631

8 posted 2012-01-05 05:36 AM

wow ~~~ I could never tell a story and make it rhyme! Great work, Mr. Pat!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

9 posted 2012-01-05 06:03 AM

Glad you stopped by, latearrival and read and commented, it makes my day,

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Many thanks, bel1e, I appreciate your kind words.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

10 posted 2012-01-05 06:17 AM

Oh I do hope you turn it into a novel like you mentioned. It would be on my bestseller list.

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

11 posted 2012-01-05 06:19 AM

Thanks, Nicole. I have a few chapters on it already. I have tentatively named it "Adam and Eve,"

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2012-01-05 06:46 PM

Fine writing...James

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

13 posted 2012-01-05 07:16 PM

Thanks,James.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

14 posted 2012-01-16 12:17 PM

What a gripping story! I enjoyed it immensely!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

15 posted 2012-01-16 07:48 AM

Many thank, suthern, I appreciate the support.

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