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JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

0 posted 2011-12-22 09:57 AM

okay, maybe a big silly
the moment is gone
you're left with eggface
take-it-back-take-it-back
screaming to yourself
mortified and disgusted
helpless in wonderment
like climbing mountain's
unreachable peak alone
never been done before
almost died getting up it
but you did, but you did
pulling yourself over last
jagged rock to the plateau
you are in shock and awe
beholding the site you see
at the top of the mountain
that's never been climbed a
gaudy Best Western Motel

©December 18, 2011 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

1 posted 2011-12-22 11:41 AM

s little like reinventing the wheel my friend...I hate it when that happens... good write!

Lori

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2011-12-22 12:08 PM

Hi Lori, and Merry Christmas. Thank you for checking out this little piece.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2011-12-22 01:45 PM

You use very effective imagery in this, dear Jerry. Very powerful outburst of emotions!

Margherita

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

4 posted 2011-12-22 01:52 PM

"you are in shock and awe
beholding the site you see
at the top of the mountain
that's never been climbed a
gaudy Best Western Motel"

You tickle thoughts very well my friend.
Enjoyed the venture.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

5 posted 2011-12-22 02:23 PM

Thanks, Margherita, I'm happy you found this poem to your liking . . .

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JL, although I admit that I don't often write on the funny side I thank you for accepting this as one of my attempts.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

Spiros Zafiris
Senior Member

since 2002-10-20

Posts 982
Canada

6 posted 2011-12-25 07:59 AM

..enjoyed much..says much
more than one may think..i
must revisit..thanks..>>spiros

tracie66
Member Elite

since 2000-01-18

Posts 4713
Australia

7 posted 2011-12-25 08:01 AM

...lol I love this :-)

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe
— W. E. Channing

JerryPat2
Member Laureate

since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

8 posted 2011-12-25 08:41 AM

Thank you, Spiros, and yes, there is a deeper meaning.

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Thanks tracie66. It's all a big joke, isn't it? Gotta love it.

~*~ If they give you lined paper, write sideways. ~*~

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