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2islander2
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since 2008-03-12
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by the sea

0 posted 2011-11-25 01:03 PM



Miss, is there best before date
on your kisses with cream ?
and your princess’s donjons,
on your meringues in the shape of whim?
is there best before date
on your legs of gazelle
and your cheeks in cheeses,
time goes by and the vinegar
goes rancid my heart without potion,
where are your round grapefruits
your sweet apples in the toffy,
I am getting tired not to taste it
because surely there is best before date
on your vegetables of pigeon,
and on your days coated with doughnuts,
will I taste it some day, Miss,
the more I am afraid, the more I wait
the more I wait, more I am afraid,
I am afraid that there is best before date
on your courtship in disappointments,
on your courtship in promotion.


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2011-11-26 11:04 AM


Such an exquisitely creative poem, dear Yann.

Pour toi: La pensée du jour de la part de CLES

L’optimisme est une forme de courage
qui donne confiance aux autres et mène au succès. (Baden-Powell).

So go ahead without fear and taste!

Enjoyed this much.
Margherita  


ebonygirl
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since 2011-07-14
Posts 2000
California U.S.A
2 posted 2011-11-26 05:38 PM


If you use a good preservative almost anything can be extended past its date but its best enjoyed in the present,
enjoyed your poem,
ms. e

Marchmadness
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since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
3 posted 2011-11-27 03:42 AM


Hi yann, I think you should follow Margherita's advice. She's a very wise woman.
                             Ida

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Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
4 posted 2011-11-29 01:18 AM


Yep to Margherita!  Taste away, dear Yann.  Love this!

xoxoxo
A

JL
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since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
5 posted 2011-11-29 09:11 AM


Fascinating play on words.

Enjoyed.

JL

Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself.
Maranatha!

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