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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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Been feeling a bit psychotic These daze They come like déjà vu Ghosts glimpses twinges Red flags and herrings Divided bipolar ying yanging Full pendulum swing Trying to believe I’ve filled my double chin With wisdom and superstition Not fear and humiliation Wisdom tells me We’ve been around this block before Superstition listens Pays attention I discuss it among my selves A multiple choice Semester exam With essays on morality True / false on reality Spring cleaning soul search inventory Assets debits Options Reorganization diversification intoxication liquidation Repetition Intuition Circles cycles orbits Laws of nature That brings the pendulum to a stop Dead center And until that day It will pass and linger A little more each way Coming closer bit by bit Ups and downs dwindling with momentum Sliding with the sand through the vortex Of the cerebral cortex and synaptic activity I recognize my sanity Each time it passes by I smile and wave We chat a bit About winter coming And time for conversations About growing old and going crazy (repost) |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
A lot to take in here, Lori. You used your words very effective and colorful. When we began to self-analysis ourself's all too often we only analysis what doesn't need to be searched out. It seems that in your case, and this poem, you sacrifice yourself to your words. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks for the in depth comment Jerry. What you think is important to me.  Lori |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is so good in so many ways...hate to even pick a favorite part, but if I had to, this would be it: "Trying to believe I’ve filled my double chin With wisdom and superstition Not fear and humiliation" ...many nods of agreement, smiles and lots of pleasure in reading this one...aw shucks, I will just have to go back and read it again...a task I shall welcome |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I absolutely loved this, Lori. I loved the blend of the mega-serious and the hilariously funny. I particularly enjoyed you discussing it among yourselves and every word of the last stanza where you recognised your sanity every time it passes and then chatting with it! I was in fits of laughter at these parts, but recognise and respect the seriousnes of other parts. You have inspired me to repost my "Look Ma, No Mind" and "Forced Consciousness" although the latter is less similar in meaning, but has some similarities in technique. You are an excellent poet, but I think this is my favourite of all those of yours that I have read. Owl |
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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt Senior Member
since 2003-10-26
Posts 1105Watertown, NY |
quote: lol, thats my favorite line, and like Owl, this is my favorite piece from your collection. I thoroughly enjoyed this read, there is a quirkiness to this with some in depth thoughts. *added to library* I'm never disappointed when I click on your offerings to these blue pages. Always a pleasure. -Trina |
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The_Doctors_Angel_32 Member
since 2011-01-14
Posts 337Florida, USA |
This is awesome. It was like getting ready for a test. I loved multiple choice ones because I would always ace them most of the time. When the family is together, the soul is at peace - Russian Proverb |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Steven, Owl,Trina and The_Doctors_Angel_32- Thank you all so much for your amazing response to this poem! It is an older piece of mine that I wrote when I was still a "closet" poet. So I am especially glad that you "got it". Lori |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Came back to enjoy this again! Owl |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When one can acknowledge one's personal habits, then you know you're reading something good. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks Owl! -------------------------------------------- Sunshine-  Lori |
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