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martiniat8 Senior Member
since 2003-06-21
Posts 897Prague, Bohemia, Czech Republic |
How faded are you, my rose in the stillness of an endless night shackled sitting motionless in the unseen moonlight the only sound and movement of that cursed and still beating heart deep within breathing breast no cause nor hope but within the rest and the dim light of a distant candle that warms the face of an Angel I cannot see |
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JerryPat Senior Member
since 2010-10-30
Posts 1991Louisiana/America |
Such a melancholy poem, martiniat8, but that does not take away from its absolute charm. Reading this is like watching the sun disappear behind an ominous cloud as you sit helplessly and sad. It isn't exactly Poeish, but I believe Edgar would have liked it very much. ~ Good health is merely the slowest possible rate at which one can die. ~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Lovely, melancholy thoughts, Martinia8. enjoyed. Ida |
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DrinaLove Junior Member
since 2010-12-23
Posts 30California |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
a very enjoyable read yann |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
You tackle love with an angst that sets your work apart. Gotta love it! (as Jerry would say) Lori |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
others have described this write far more eloquently than I could ever do, so after the umpteenth read, I found myself memorizing your ending because I loved it so much...masterful write |
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