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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Clean House This is an oldie I thought I'd posted a long time ago. But since I couldn't find it, I decided you'd been spared long enough. LOL I threw away the cards you’d sent and souvenirs I’d saved I am not likely to forget the worst mistake I’ve made I flung your pretty words into the trash of cyberspace I do not need them to recall thoughts of your lying face How could you have completely fooled me? Were my eyes so blind? I know men of integrity - mistook you for that kind You stripped my spirit of all hope, crushed dreams beneath your heel I pray to God you’ll never know the hell you made me feel You morphed into a cold monster, the woman I’d been died Drowned in gallons of bitter tears wrung from my vacant eyes And now you dare to find my strength something you can admire? That’s much too much like gasoline marveling at its fire! All credit for whatever it was that helped me survive Belongs to those whose hands risked blisters to keep me alive Without their incessant caring, my blood might have been shed Though I now know you’re not worth spit, much less me being dead I have no more illusions where your wretched heart’s concerned I just wish I’d known your ilk before I was badly burned I long for your happiness, if only to keep you from Preying on another like me - vulnerable and dumb |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"I pray to God you’ll never know the hell you made me feel You morphed into a cold monster, the woman I’d been died Drowned in gallons of bitter tears wrung from my vacant eyes And now you dare to find my strength something you can admire? "That’s much too much like gasoline marveling at its fire! All credit for whatever it was that helped me survive Belongs to those whose hands risked blisters to keep me alive Without their incessant caring, my blood might have been shed Though I now know you’re not worth spit, much less me being dead" Thank God for your friends! And you are so right to say he was not worth spit. Of course right after that you might have added: Jackass! Excellent write of a difficult situation. Hugs to ya suthern...  JL  Love the Lord your God with all your heart, and with all your soul,and with all your mind. Love your neighbor as yourself. Maranatha! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ruth, I am glad this is an oldie, and not a recent hurt. I hope it isn't hurting too much any more. I am glad you were able to put him behind you and get on with your life. He was not worthy of you. You deserve worlds better than that! Smiles. Owl |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
I, for one, am happy that you dug this out of the oldie pit. I have never read a better constructed poem. But it was the passion that was behind the construction that this work of art that is the shinning light. There isn't one line in these words from your heart that is misplaced, or doesn't need to be there. ~*~ Tell me whom you love, and I will tell you who you are.--Houssaye ~*~ [This message has been edited by JerryPat2 (10-11-2011 09:40 PM).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
First, remind me to try and never make you mad! Second ... I, too, am glad this is an oldie and fervently hope it is nothing more than a distant memory now. Need I say: very well expressed? - I think not, it's obvious... Enjoyed this read my friend. . . my heart - j. |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Most excellent purge poem! I agree with JL there is room for "Jackass". I have two dead ex's and it brought 'em both back. Glad it is in the past. Lori |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
This is extraordinary, Ruth... and other than doubting I could ever view you as *dumb, (though love makes us all do some pretty dumb things at times), I loved every bit of it. Sharp and poignant... and deeply dark, all good in my book. Glad it's an oldie, even so. Michael |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dayummm suthern gal!! I hate learning those kinda lessons. ....gotta clean house out of it anyway. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
There is enough here to make one shudder, dear Ruth. Some lessons are tough ones indeed, yet when they are learned they might help others to avoid this kind of suffering (but the rule seems to say that personal experience is always needed!). We should never allow anybody to bring so much hurt into our hearts. Emotional detachment becomes necessary to maintain sanity. Very impressive work with a strong cadence that sounds like a drum's rhytm. M |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Sad, Ruth, but I'm glad you cleaned house. Living in a dirty house can be pretty miserable. Ida |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
JL: I do thank God for friends... Then and now. *S* As for the added description... I was too afraid he'd hear his name and think I was calling him back! LOL Thank you so much!! Owl: Thank you very much... and I'm glad it's not a recent hurt, too! *S* Jerry: You know how you always think of what you should have said after the time has passed to say it? *S* My muse didn't hesitate with this one... temper had it tumbling out. *S* Thank you so much... I appreciate your comments more than I can say! *S* jwesley: ROFL... fortunately, I'm usually fairly slow to anger. *G* Now if you plan to lead me on just to trample my heart and then compliment the pitiful remains on surviving you might need running shoes. LOL Thank you very much, my friend! *S* Lori: Sorry I dredged up those memories for you. *S* Thank you!!! Michael: Even if it wasn't far in the past, such words from you would have me beaming. *S* Thank you so very much!! Blues: That I did! LOL I really do clean when I'm upset... My apartment may be cluttered right now, but that's a sign of contentment. *G* Thank you! Margherita: I don't think I'm capable of detachment. *S* But I have learned to be more discerning! *S* Thank you very much! Marchmadness: And I haven't missed a bit of it. *S* Thank you!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now that's what I'd call a thorough house-cleaning!!! I am reminded of the lyrics from a song from the musical "Oklahoma" ~ "I'm gonna wash that man right out of my hair and send him on his way!" Well, sister friend, ya sure done did a good job of it! ~ and baby, look at you now! You have the cleanest house ~ and hair! ~ of anybody I know! lol Love you bunches, Suthern Gal! Linda xo  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
EA: You know I'm going to be humming that song all day, right? LOL (But... same composers, different musical... it was South Pacific! LOL) However... seeing your name lifts my spirits so much you could have typed the alphabet and I'd be grinning... thank you so very much! *S* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* What a coincidence! I just looked under my bed... *g* (Not an easy task since my bed is bolted to the wall...not my idea.) Thought I'd say hey. I'm off to burn some sage now. *chuckle* House cleaning and house cleansing? You betcha.  |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
The poem is filled with anger, but also self love. Many women cannot get out of situations such as this... a pity that they have no backup team to pull them out. But apparently you did,of course only because you fought for your self, and with a little help,pulled it off. "Though I now know you’re not worth spit, much less me being dead" That is the key line in the poem, in my opinion.. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
serenity: Seeing your name here gave me a smile... Thank you! *S* With no angst to fuel a cleaning frenzy, I only look under my bed to pull out Colin when he's trying to avoid a vet visit... a few dust bunnies always get slaughtered in the procedure. LOL ice: The anger's arrival was a long time coming... but it was the impetus to letting to and moving on. *S* Thank you very much for your read and response! *S* |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dang, when you clean - you clean. Thank God you did. Thank God this was years ago. You are far too special for people like this - and you write of incredible pain with such style. You sure do have style. Love, Alison |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved One, This is utterly wonderful, I love it. Love your writing lady, YOU ROCK Forget you NEVER X x x x x x Mushy X x x x x Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Beloved One, This is utterly wonderful, I love it. Love your writing lady, YOU ROCK Forget you NEVER X x x x x x Mushy X x x x x Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Alison & Marsha: Two of my favorite ladies stopping in makes my day! Thank you both so very much... with friends like you, I can face anything... and did. *S* ((((HUGS)))) |
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